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Pond - Haiku

bull's-eye ripples spread
liquid glass surface shattered -
pond catches boy's stone.


Susan Ashley
August 28, 2017

Copyright © Susan Ashley | Year Posted 2017

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December 12, 2017 at 6:44 PM

I used to skip stones on the surface of the sea...Well tried...Sometimes I did it...Hope your day was fine... I'm at that line again...need to break through another bubble... I don't know what to write... All the best Susan...A big hug...

December 12, 2017 at 7:27 PM

Skipping stones on the sea, Arturo, sounds so pleasant.. My day was busy with work and family.. how about yours? It's funny but I think we're kind of in the same place; you don't know what to write about and my muse has hit the snooze, so we're both stuck! :) It'll work itself out for the two of us I'm sure. Thank you for your sweet comments and the lovely visit. Warmest wishes mon ami and big hugs always..~Susan

November 29, 2017 at 8:16 AM

I find that children (and grownups) cannot resist the temptation to throw stones into water, whether a pond, lake or sea. You vividly captured one such moment in time, Susan. I love the rippling effect which lasts long after the act. ~ Warm regards // paul

November 29, 2017 at 2:55 PM

Paul, I totally agree with your sentiments. There's something mesmerizing about creating ripples and something intriguing about how they continue to reverberate ever so gently as they move out through time.. Your thoughtful musings has my musings now thoughtful too. Hmm, you have an interesting mind my friend. ~Warmest wishes.. Sue

September 6, 2017 at 4:33 PM

Susan, Nice work! Imagery is intriguing ! Original and captivating! My best, chuck

September 6, 2017 at 7:54 PM

Hi Chuck, thank you for visiting and for the really wonderful comment. I appreciate your positive feedback greatly! I hope you are having a wonderful evening! :) Susan

September 2, 2017 at 6:52 PM

what wonderful imagery Susan:-) hugs jan xx

September 2, 2017 at 7:10 PM

Hi Jan, thank you for your kind and positive feedback. I'm glad you like my haiku. Your wonderful comments and visits are SO appreciated by me. I hope you have a lovely evening :)

James Marshall Goff

August 30, 2017 at 8:00 PM

Agreed with reviews below, Susan! Nicely nostalgic!

August 30, 2017 at 8:44 PM

Hi James, thank you very much for your visit and kind comment. I so appreciate you taking the time to read my poem, so nice of you! :)

August 30, 2017 at 7:55 PM

I love the title and every line of this fab Haiku :)

August 30, 2017 at 8:41 PM

Oh my dear Akkina, thank you so much for your lovely visit and kind comment. You always bring such joy with you! Much appreciation for you my friend :)

Alfred Berggren

August 30, 2017 at 5:11 PM

How many times have I done the same thing? Or see how many time I can skip a stone across the surface of a pond.

August 30, 2017 at 8:27 PM

Thank you for your visit and comment Alfred :)

August 29, 2017 at 8:18 PM

Lovely haiku Susan...enjoyed

August 30, 2017 at 8:26 PM

Thank you for your kindness and your visit Joseph. Always appreciated! :)

August 29, 2017 at 9:02 AM

The last line really pulls it all together. Really nice imagery :)

August 29, 2017 at 12:19 PM

Thank you for leaving such a wonderful comment and for the visit Bernard. Your kind insightful words are so appreciated by me :)

August 28, 2017 at 7:36 PM

One of my favorite pastimes, love it Susan...

August 28, 2017 at 8:03 PM

Hi Charlie, thank you so much for your wonderful comment. I'm glad my Haiku reminded you of lovely memories... much appreciation for your visit and kind words :)

Andrea Dietrich

August 28, 2017 at 5:34 PM

such a cool final line to this one. Awesome.

August 28, 2017 at 8:11 PM

Hi Andrea, thank you so much for your wonderful words and much appreciation for you visit. I'm glad you liked the last line of my Haiku, I was really happy with it too! :)

August 28, 2017 at 3:12 PM

Great description of stone skipping, Susan! Janice

August 28, 2017 at 8:15 PM

Thank you so much Janice for stopping by and leaving your wonderful comment that I appreciate so much :)

August 28, 2017 at 1:38 PM

A terrific image Susan.

August 28, 2017 at 8:09 PM

Much appreciation Tim for your visit and your very wonderful comment :)

August 28, 2017 at 1:24 PM

What a great way to put it (the last line). Really like it. Beverly Read

August 28, 2017 at 8:05 PM

Thank you Beverly, I'm glad you enjoyed my Haiku. Thank you for your visit and kind words :)

August 28, 2017 at 12:47 PM

Well done Susan, three lines and the picture is complete - loved it - Mike

August 28, 2017 at 7:53 PM

Hi Michael, thank you so much for your awesome comment. I'm so happy you enjoyed my poem and your visit and kind words are much appreciated :)

August 28, 2017 at 11:13 AM

A Bulls-eye of a haiku Susan...god bless...^WW^

August 28, 2017 at 7:42 PM

Your comment was right on target WW lol! Thank you for taking the time to comment on my poem and much appreciation for your visit and very kind words my friend :)

August 28, 2017 at 10:11 AM

Lovely! Well done Susan!!

August 28, 2017 at 7:30 PM

Thank you so much Vijay! Your comments and visits are always such a pleasure :)

August 28, 2017 at 10:11 AM

Great visualization Susan. Well done! :)

August 28, 2017 at 7:32 PM

Many thanks Heidi! I always appreciate your feedback immensely. Thank you for your encouraging and kind words :)

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