Pond

Clear pristine water glimmering, shimmering glow shaded rock jewels , lie, few walk amongst the cool flow ripples reflect in moonlight 5/22/12

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/22/2012 9:14:00 PM

Beautiful pond tanka, Phyllis. I wrote one too. Probably will post it tomorrow. I see you got more than one new one up today. Let me go see.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 5/22/2012 5:00:00 PM

a beautiful sight of viewing delight Phyl.. got lost in these lovely lines .. hope all is well my friend.. we are finally home in NJ and oh btw Happy Birthday to u .. it was mine too .. we celebrated at the seashore .. hope u had fun..

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/22/2012 3:25:00 PM

Oh, great moonlight work..Like the line "few walk amongst the cool flow"...Those rocks are slippery aren't they..This will glimmer and shimmer in the winner's list..I am glad that there is another person out there who sees things in the clouds..Sara

Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 5/22/2012 2:33:00 PM

'...glimmering,shimmering,' neat! I love the 'glow/flow' rhyme, and the pleasing assonance of jew(el)...few...cool...moon(light).' Well done, Phyl!! :)