Pond

Clear pristine water
glimmering, shimmering glow
shaded rock jewels , lie,
few walk amongst the cool flow
ripples reflect in moonlight

5/22/12
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012

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Dietrich Avatar
May 22, 2012 at 9:14 PM
Beautiful pond tanka, Phyllis. I wrote one too. Probably will post it tomorrow. I see you got more than one new one up today. Let me go see.
Sweetheart Avatar
May 22, 2012 at 5:00 PM
a beautiful sight of viewing delight Phyl.. got lost in these lovely lines .. hope all is well my friend.. we are finally home in NJ and oh btw Happy Birthday to u .. it was mine too .. we celebrated at the seashore .. hope u had fun..
Kendrick Avatar
May 22, 2012 at 3:25 PM
Oh, great moonlight work..Like the line "few walk amongst the cool flow"...Those rocks are slippery aren't they..This will glimmer and shimmer in the winner's list..I am glad that there is another person out there who sees things in the clouds..Sara
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May 22, 2012 at 2:33 PM
'...glimmering,shimmering,' neat! I love the 'glow/flow' rhyme, and the pleasing assonance of jew(el)...few...cool...moon(light).' Well done, Phyl!! :)
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