John Hamilton Poet Didactic

Point of No Return

Point of no return


7pm         All the boys arrive at the sports bar/pub
7:30pm    The championship game begins, first round of drinks
8:00pm    2nd round of beers, Johnny pays is in good mood
8:15pm    Hometown team scores ahead 1-0 crowd goes wild
8:30pm    Bill buys a round of shots for everyone, mood is high
8:45pm    Hometown team scores again  2-0, sense of victory in the air
9:00pm    Celebration starts with 3rd round of beers
9:15pm    Visitors score silences the multitude of spectators
9:30pm    Hometown team scores room erupts in applause
9:45pm    Chanting Victory another round of beers, Bobby pays
10:00pm  Visitors score 2 goals in quick succession, panic sets in
10:15pm  Nervous customers swill shots awaiting final minute
10:30pm  Final minute hometown score, win championship final 4-3
10:45pm  Jeff buys round of shots in victory celebration.
11:00pm  Everyone feels like a champion, decide to go home feeling good
11:15pm  Johnny, Billy, Bobby, Jeff, get in the car together
11:16pm  Johnny puts the key in the ignition
11:17pm  Johnny drives drunk- kills everyone.

11:16pm  Was the point of no return.


For Nicolas point of no return contest
December10,2016

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Winged Warrior December 15, 2016 at 5:16 PM Congrats!!! my friend John...very well constructed Didactic...god bless...^WW^ John Hamilton December 15, 2016 at 10:17 PM Thanks WW, nice to see you flying high again on the soup!

Connie Marcum Wong December 11, 2016 at 3:34 AM It is so important to plan ahead to have a designated driver or a place where everyone can just stay after a party where they've been drinking. Often the young think they're invincible and they can't be reasoned with after they've had several drinks. They think they're perfectly able to drive. Your poem brings that fact to light with chilling veracity John. I am so thankful that none of my four children drink. A great entry John! ; ) 7 John Hamilton December 11, 2016 at 12:27 PM Thanks Connie much appreciated.

Casarah Nance December 10, 2016 at 5:06 PM Sadly too many loose lives by drinking and driving, no one wins, hugs John Hamilton December 11, 2016 at 12:26 PM Thanks Cas so true.

Heidi Sands December 10, 2016 at 11:12 AM Wow John. That is a strong message. Well done. Good luck in the contest :) John Hamilton December 10, 2016 at 1:36 PM Thanks Heidi

Alexis Y. December 10, 2016 at 11:12 AM WoW! John, you've penned a sad yet well written take on the contest theme. Drinking and driving is never good. You expressed that fact very well in this clever piece. It reads like a winner to me. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. A without a doubt seven:-) Alexis John Hamilton December 10, 2016 at 1:36 PM Thanks Alexis.

Richard Lamoureux December 10, 2016 at 10:41 AM A sad tale very well told. Good luck in the contest. John Hamilton December 10, 2016 at 10:55 AM Thanks Richard, it seems like here in Canada it's still an epidemic, keeps happening, wow!

Paloma P December 10, 2016 at 10:25 AM Kind of saw that coming, happens all often in reality, a moving depiction John. John Hamilton December 10, 2016 at 10:54 AM Thanks Paloma.