Len Gasun Poet Ghazal

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A poem just inspired by the contest introducing a new form. I was just interested and did try. 

Please Tell Me So

When the sky is dark, will the rain follow? Please tell me so.
When I’m feeling blue, can you make me glow? Please tell me so.

While each and every one has his own idiosyncrasy,
Does your patience with mine then help me grow? Please tell me so.

Let’s be grateful to people who love us and give us joy,
Let those who irk be ignored. Don’t feel low? Please tell me so.

It’s better to love and lost than never to love at all,
Is it from deep pain that hearts turn hallow? Please tell me so.

The direction of the wind is never in our control,
Do we’ve to be docile to where it blows? Please tell me so.

All life’s challenges are not supposed to paralyze us,
They’re for discovering self not to go? Please tell me so.

Life is like a river of current sometimes rough and smooth,
It has beauty. Do we go to the flow? Please tell me so.

This beautiful world… nothing is more permanent than change,
Do update me with the new trends you know. Please tell me so.        
                                                    ;))))))))

Nov. 7, 2013   10.10pm




Note:
* 14 syllables in each line


Sixth Place
Contest: Take the Leap
Judged: 11/11/13
Sponsor: Poet Debbie Guzzi

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Skat A November 15, 2013 at 11:11 AM Leonora, Congratulations, on your 'Take the Leap' win............ LOVE ~ SKAT ~

Sheri Fresonke Harper November 13, 2013 at 12:49 PM Leonora, I like the plea for better communication that comes through this very loving ghazal, congratulations on your win

Sandra Adams November 12, 2013 at 9:01 PM i think you did a great job with this form Leonora...wonderful poem, congrats on your win :)

Dr.Ram Mehta November 12, 2013 at 3:14 AM Congratulations on the win, Leo

Andrea Dietrich November 10, 2013 at 9:50 AM It reads well though I can't remember all the rules right now to know if you did the repeating part right or not. It's a sweet poem, Leonora and I am glad that your family was left unscathed by the storm.

Bukang Liwayway November 9, 2013 at 11:50 PM wow, you've done a good job..it goes well my dear friend..excellent for me :) ;) I like it ;) good day

Debbie Guzzi November 7, 2013 at 3:41 PM Okies honey bun ;) you DO have the idea, SOUP MAIL Len Gasun November 7, 2013 at 5:19 PM Thank you so much my dear friend Deb! Big hugs! I've already edited it but I still considered the equal number of syllables/measure in each line which is 14 including the refrain. More blessings! Thanks a lot for sharing this amazing form. love lots always, Leonora

Matthew Anish November 7, 2013 at 11:03 AM Nice ghazal here! In Brooklyn we mad up a form 911 - which has 9 syllables - one syllable 1 syllable. Try to write one. They are fun! Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Russell Sivey November 6, 2013 at 9:22 PM This is a fabulous write my friend! My favorite part of a line has to be the, "...nothing is more permanent than change, " oh how true that statement is! I really enjoyed reading this enlightening poem this evening! What a blessed piece, Great Work!!

Poet Destroyer A November 6, 2013 at 8:00 PM A LOVELY SWEET POEM OF THOUGHT AND WONDER.... LEO...my dearest SiS & BBF... I know this river you speak of. I found the beauty to be deeper than the sea. I like the approach in trying a new form... Absolutely BEAUTIFUL MY DEAREST FRIEND! I understand like many here -- i know what it feels --to be in search of the right light with questions... enjoying your poem.... love ~ your BBF... LINDA

Bl Devnath November 6, 2013 at 2:21 PM Excellent philosophical Ghazal worded with golden ink having visions of nice wisdom. Loving poem without doubt. You are renewing your energy to your excellency, my friend, Loved always, bl

Nette Onclaud November 6, 2013 at 11:53 AM ohh, lors.. this has great cadence and content.. if a first attempt, i am astounded.. i had a default getaway only for TPS in my computer and couldn't post.. great to know you got my message... take care; we are expecting a really harsh typhoon.. prayers please.. love and huggs..:)

Anne-Lise Andresen November 6, 2013 at 11:10 AM - .... "It is better to love and lost than never to love at all" you say Leonora - A rule of life that everyone should live by ... - A really well written poem dear friend Leonora! - All the best to you. - Night time is at your now .... I think ..... wish you a good night and sweet dreams. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)