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A gloom I found, hot as Hades in a garden

of dreams, fairy tales, romance, and music.

pond of piranhas become as hot as Hades clothesline of deaf ears 11/11/2017 A gloom I found hot as Hades in a garden of dreams, fairy tales, romance, and music.

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/13/2017 8:39:00 AM

We women feel trapped doing those chores sometimes for sure that clothes line or the clothes hung upon it will not listen, speak back nor understand..I hope this is just creative writing and not some very deep feelings put out on the line..Thanks for the visits to my page..Your presence is appreciated..Sara

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty

Date: 11/13/2017 7:31:00 AM

clothesline of deaf ears..excellent correlatives.Have a good day Eve.Hugs.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/12/2017 8:33:00 PM

The imagery is so dark, Eve. But it's very good. That senryu, the last line of it is brilliant, clothesline of deaf ears!! wow.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 11/12/2017 3:12:00 PM

I feel there is pain in your heart. Piranhas in a pond will only bring death..Hugs, dear.

Silent One

Date: 11/12/2017 8:23:00 AM

Two great senryu... I agree with Russell..

Russell Sivey

Date: 11/12/2017 6:55:00 AM

Very intriguing write my friend...I would hate to see Hades as this school of piranhas, so frightening indeed! But you have illustriously portrayed this poem with all the fine skills that you have been blessed with! I really enjoyed reading your grandiose piece this morning! You have masterfully written a tremendous poem, Great Work!!