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Pitch Dark

pitch dark small chamber
abnormal pulsating mass
loving human heart

blood regurgitating
heart grows weaker with each beat  

Sponsor: Suzette Crous
Contest: Tanka-The Pivot

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Linda-Marie Sweetheart

October 26, 2012 at 9:14 PM

DYNAMIC VISUAL BRINGING CHILLS TO THIS HEART SARA .. SCARY ONE LUV JUST IN MOOD FOR HALLOWEEN TOO ..

Joe Maverick

October 26, 2012 at 1:21 PM

The heart growing weaker Sara..) Much to think on again.. I would hope the spirit grows stronger;in you as a counterpoint.."May you be blessed in abundance By the Lord.. Thank you as always for comments..)

Andrea Dietrich

October 25, 2012 at 2:40 PM

Very descriptive, Sara. It will be great fun to see who wins this pivot tanka contest!

Joann Grisetti

October 25, 2012 at 12:09 PM

A truly unique and remarkable tanka. Love to read you poems.

Russell Sivey

October 25, 2012 at 7:47 AM

Wow, the power within your lines is truly fascinating and amazing my friend! I really enjoyed reading this tremendous and fully remarkable poem this morning! What an enjoyable and energetic piece, Great Work!!