Laura Breidenthal Poet Ode

Piscean Pull

Wow—is the word!
You are something most surprising
I can feel you boiling in my blood
Waiting, trusting in that torrent
Of psychic union and revelation

You lock eyes with me—
They are blue, love-stricken, wild
I am pleasantly frightened
And comforted all at once!
Somewhere in your stare
You have managed to caress my soul 
You have masterfully, 
Grabbed hold…
Of all that is me—
This red force of obduration
This imprisoned fool I am…
Fretting at every given moment 
In my vulnerability - how is it?
How is it that you know,
That you know our future is strong?
You just know, 
This fiery….greed,
These flaws that shame me 
Somehow you know this fear in me!
And everything you know,
You will see 
You will acceptingly see

You first doused me with glittery lust
Steam and gleam in your keen pupils
In your gaping lips,
In your smooth-trodden truths,
I weaken in your words

You flow me out of my element, 
As you pin me to the bed of dreams
You are an opulent ocean
Deep depths I know not!
I am merely a sliver of light 
Becoming something solid in your grasp
Crystalline nerves melting in your knowing hands

Where is your surrender?
You ask me, in silence

I am your ball of glowing fervor
About to burst in your psychedelic waves
You are turning and turning
You are feeling me
You are feeling all my feelings! 
That I try so desperately to conceal

Dissatisfaction and longing you recognize
In my volcanic hindrance
Your waters heave patience
You calm—you tear up
My fears hold me back,
And you want me to free them
This struggle is our beauty—
Is part of our art

And in you, in your rest
You salvage all the love we can muster
You remember all our moments
Fueling your empathic currents 
Holding me close to your heaving tides
In a heartfelt flood of understanding

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James Inman October 6, 2018 at 1:26 PM Incredible write Laura, filled with beautiful lines of passion and longing. "You flow me out of my element, As you pin me to the bed of dreams," "This struggle is our beauty— Is part of our art." Wonderful.

Justin Bordner April 13, 2018 at 6:54 PM Endangered in the enchantment of being discovered, and cherished for that which you truly are, by one worthy, and also by by one whom desires the same. I love the romantic and vibrant honesty in this poem Poetess..."I am your ball of glowing fervor about to burst in your psychedelic waves...", awesome passion woman...J.A.B. A FAV! Laura Breidenthal April 14, 2018 at 2:22 AM I'm utterly in love with the psychic flow of Piscean passion, Justin. Thank you so much for reviewing this poem. Your input means the world to me. <3~Laura

Maria Williams March 21, 2018 at 10:33 PM Gosh Woman - you have a way with words, sheer passion in these lines. You take your readers on a roller coaster of emotions. Great write Laura....Maria Laura Breidenthal March 22, 2018 at 10:43 AM Thanks so much for reading this one, and for the sweet compliment, Maria. This was quite emotional indeed. I appreciate your visits.<3 ~Laura

John Gondolf March 21, 2018 at 5:44 AM Laura, this is such a passion filled write, the foreplay of your words makes me want to read more. Enjoyed this. John Laura Breidenthal March 21, 2018 at 5:15 PM "the foreplay of your words" - I love that! Thank you John. So glad you enjoyed. <3~Laura

Darlene De Beaulieu March 19, 2018 at 8:57 PM Hello Laura Breidenthal, wow! This is a wonderful written poem. I enjoyed the read. have a nice evening my friend. Laura Breidenthal March 20, 2018 at 9:16 AM Hello, Darlene! Your comment made me smile, thank you so much! <3~Laura

Richard Evans March 19, 2018 at 8:51 PM A sustained outpouring of passion like a long slow release. I dig the way you take a nuance and turn it into a novel. So cool. Laura Breidenthal March 20, 2018 at 9:15 AM Thank you so much Richard. I appreciate your visit here. "A sustained outpouring of passion" - a nice, appropriate expression for this write. A slow release is right! Thanks again... <3 ~Laura