Dr. Upma A. Sharma Poet Sijo

Picturesque- Summer Love

Flying high, touching the hues, of daylight end, heavenly peace,

Moving sand, writing with heart, and hang onto, see waves erase,

Am I real, imagination, Picture perfect, my dream ?


Summer love, a treasure trove, heat rises to, a newer high,

Bubbly self, sojourns beside, ever I heave, a deeper sigh,

Dream come true, A fascination, an illusion, factual ?









Written on 2/6/14
Sijo strings - 15/15/15, 15/15/15
Contest- Sijo strings
Sponsor- Debbie Guzzi

Awarded 5th place

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Emmanuel Brian Oule July 6, 2014 at 10:58 AM My lady congs... keep going Bryan Writes

Elaine George July 4, 2014 at 6:30 AM A Sijo, full of action paints such a beautiful picture. Many congrats on your sensational sijo win. bn, Lainie,

Elaine George July 4, 2014 at 6:25 AM A Sijo, full of action paints such a beautiful picture. Many congrats on your sensational sijo win. bn, Lainie,

Andrea Dietrich July 3, 2014 at 10:10 PM a big congratulations for your fine win, and I was happy to finally see your entry in the contest.

Poet Destroyer A July 3, 2014 at 11:34 AM Dr Upma, lovely win..PD

Dr.Ram Mehta July 3, 2014 at 5:56 AM Very descriptive piece of a poem, Dr Upma, congrats on the win

Casarah Nance July 2, 2014 at 5:53 PM I loved the last three lines so very much, well done on your win :) :)

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser July 2, 2014 at 5:16 PM Your second lines are so amazing..:) great great one dr. Upma kudos!!! :)

Pandita Sietesantos July 2, 2014 at 3:39 PM Hi Dr. Upma, congratulations on well-deserved high placement in this contest This is such a beautiful descriptive piece! Kindest regards.

Debbie Guzzi July 2, 2014 at 3:13 PM Work on not forgetting your articles dear, [the,a,an] that with make your verse more fluid, I believe they are not used much in your native language Congrad's on your win. [mail] Light & Love

John Lawless July 2, 2014 at 2:44 PM I like it. It captures the hustle and bustle of the summer, its chaos and charm John Lawless July 2, 2014 at 2:45 PM OOPS!!! didn't think the first comment got posted.

John Lawless July 2, 2014 at 2:40 PM This Sijo has the feel of summer, the hustle and bustle of recreation and relationships, and beaches, and well ....and. I enjoyed the ride.

Arlene Smith July 2, 2014 at 1:39 PM Congrats on a great win, Dr. Sharma my friend. Hugs.. Arlene Dr. Upma A. Sharma July 2, 2014 at 2:04 PM Thnx dear Arlene !

Paul Callus July 2, 2014 at 1:27 PM This is a treasure trove in itself, Upma. I notice the probing questions that seem to ask for reassurance...also as if asking us readers to participate in your write. Congrats on placing high on the winners' list. // paul Dr. Upma A. Sharma July 2, 2014 at 1:34 PM Thanks Paul ! Glad u construed exactly as I wrote, no write is complete without reader's valuable inputs //Upma//

Debbie Guzzi June 12, 2014 at 7:47 PM Little help dear new friend [not a rhyming form] each syllabic grouping needs to mean something and all of them together must relate [Flying as]3 - has no meaning [high as touching]4 has no meaning- where are [Flying high]3 has meaning! [touching the hues]4 has meaning [of daylights end] 4 [ heavenly peace] 4 / this has no rhyme [Flying high touching the hues of daylights end heavenly peace] 15 syllables / Dr. Upma A. Sharma June 12, 2014 at 10:47 PM Thanks Debbie ! I really didn't know how to go about it,, much appreciate ur efforts ! Debbie Guzzi June 12, 2014 at 7:48 PM I'd like 2 sijo's ... you will rank higher with 2 well done ones Debbie Guzzi June 12, 2014 at 7:47 PM it's OK to do less syllables but each grouping must stand alone & together SHOW don't tell..Light & Love

Sara Kendrick June 5, 2014 at 8:17 AM Reads like a winner to me..Way to go for the contest..Very creative work..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara Dr. Upma A. Sharma June 7, 2014 at 3:21 AM Thanks Sara ! Is this one sijo string enough to qualify for the contest ?

Andrea Dietrich June 4, 2014 at 3:20 PM I love the summery feeling this gives. I am not 100 percent sure, but maybe sijo string implies more than one! John Lawless July 2, 2014 at 2:39 PM I think the Sijo string is the one you tie on your finger to help remember the syllable count(s). Dr. Upma A. Sharma June 7, 2014 at 3:20 AM Thanks Andrea ! if so i will try writing one more string !

Dr.Ram Mehta June 2, 2014 at 6:22 AM Yes, it's picture perfect, Dr Upma Dr. Upma A. Sharma June 2, 2014 at 7:23 AM Thnx Dr Ram !