Picnic

the wicker picnic
on a red gingham blanket —
dulce fruit draws ants

watermelon sliced —
summer pepo with black seeds
on white paper plates

6/22/2020
Summer Haiku's Poetry Contest
Sponsor: Tania Kitchin

Checked by: howmanysyllables.com

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Aditi Mishra

July 1, 2020 at 1:31 AM

Watermelon slices on paper plates..what a lovely memory of summer picnic Kim. Congratulations on your win. Blessings and love :)

Kim Rodrigues

July 1, 2020 at 5:50 AM

Thank you, Aditi! :) Blessings and love to you too!

Joseph May

June 30, 2020 at 2:11 PM

Dropping back with congrats on your win Kim

Kim Rodrigues

June 30, 2020 at 3:47 PM

Thank you, Joe!

John Watt

June 29, 2020 at 3:27 PM

You've captured some great memories of pleasant summers gone by. I do love watermelon! Congrats on your win, Kim ~ John

Kim Rodrigues

June 29, 2020 at 6:40 PM

Thank you, John!

Funom Makama

June 29, 2020 at 3:11 PM

A great Haiku. Congratulations on your win. This is well deserved.

Kim Rodrigues

June 29, 2020 at 6:40 PM

Thank you, Funom!

Jenish Somadas

June 29, 2020 at 2:25 AM

Vivid scenes of a picnic.. Great write Kim... Congratulations..

Kim Rodrigues

June 29, 2020 at 3:43 AM

Thank you, Jenish!

Edward Ibeh

June 28, 2020 at 5:38 PM

I enjoyed this one, Kim:-) Congratulations on your win!

Kim Rodrigues

June 28, 2020 at 6:10 PM

Thanks so much! I enjoy writing it too! :) Blessings!

Eve Roper

June 28, 2020 at 5:10 PM

Congratulations on your win, Kim. Hugs Eve

Kim Rodrigues

June 28, 2020 at 6:10 PM

Thank you, Eve!

Andrea Dietrich

June 28, 2020 at 5:03 PM

Love the contrasts, especially black on white in the second one.

Kim Rodrigues

June 28, 2020 at 6:10 PM

Thank you and I also had in mind that the black seeds mimic the ants or does the red blanket. I enjoyed writing this one. I thought it would place higher but oh well. Thank you! Thank you!

Tania Kitchin

June 28, 2020 at 4:15 PM

Kim, congratulations on your winning placement with your sweet summer haiku's!

Kim Rodrigues

June 28, 2020 at 4:49 PM

Thank you, Tania! Enjoyed the contest!

Martin Braun

June 26, 2020 at 3:39 PM

Nice

Kim Rodrigues

June 26, 2020 at 3:43 PM

Thank you, Martin!

Funom Makama

June 25, 2020 at 1:16 PM

hmmmm. yummy! Yummy! The mood is on, the sun invites, the grasses wait and them all I shall not disappoint. Picnic it is, the garden's gates are opened for me and my family to give time some fun. Great write... I think in my humble opinion, this is more of a senryu.. Haikus are only for nature and natural elements.. Nonetheless, this is an awesome piece.

Kim Rodrigues

June 25, 2020 at 1:56 PM

Thank you, Funom, for your sweet comment. I believe it’s all natural but I could be wrong. <3 Kim

Silent One

June 24, 2020 at 7:43 AM

Great imagery my friend..

Kim Rodrigues

June 24, 2020 at 3:17 PM

Thanks so much! Hugs :)

Joseph May

June 23, 2020 at 6:45 PM

So beautifully done Kim, A winner for sure

Kim Rodrigues

June 24, 2020 at 3:17 PM

Here’s hoping! :) Thank you, Joseph!

Vijay Pandit

June 23, 2020 at 5:59 PM

Enjoyed the images of summer picnic--they speak eloquently, Kim.

Kim Rodrigues

June 23, 2020 at 6:09 PM

Thanks so much, my wonderful friend!

Judy Ball

June 23, 2020 at 12:22 PM

Oh lovely. Reminds me of our picnics when the kids were all young. Great job. Good luck n the contest. God Bless, JB

Kim Rodrigues

June 23, 2020 at 3:10 PM

God bless you and thank you, Judy!

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri

June 23, 2020 at 9:17 AM

Black seeds eh yeahh! I'm admiring your delicious crunchy sound of picnic terms , makes for two fab haikus! Kudos. .............. -------- Plz pleez do read and comment my newest piece, a prose and do also read the articles and data I have copy pasted in comment section below the poem so you will confirm the matter further.