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Permission To Paradise

My memory is obsolete in fashion: the short blue skirt I saw you in that day is out of date eons ago. My passion has cicatrized from when you went away, but thrifty memory still stores your grey T-shirt with spots of oil paint, your beret of modern artist that you used to wear coquettishly aslant, the bag across your chest, the thuya needle in your hair, the band-aid on your knee, the minty gloss on your sweet cherry lips, the silky moss under your pliant back, the sassy moth around my stupid head, the distant laughter, the flash of bliss, the willow’s leaf embossed on your left buttock and the most sought after remembrance of the panties that you lost in ferns in haste… One day I will exhaust my recollections but at any cost I save this one, unclouded and precise, as my permission to the paradise. 22.04.2019 Urban Sonnet Poetry Contest Emile Pinet

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Date: 4/23/2019 6:10:00 PM
I have never written a sonnet in this form but yours is truly a very beautiful creation! A definite fav for me my friend..
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Kurt Ravidas
Date: 4/23/2019 6:22:00 PM
Thank you very much, Robert. Your encouraging words sound to me as a heavenly music)
Date: 4/23/2019 5:15:00 PM
I have not attempted this contest, but I imagine this is a terrific entry!
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Kurt Ravidas
Date: 4/23/2019 5:40:00 PM
Oddly enough, but I wrote it relatively fast. Usually, it takes me long. Thank you, Caren.
Date: 4/23/2019 2:16:00 PM
Just as a thought, your poem might be easier to read as three six-line stanzas and a final couplet. Also, do you mean "band-aid" and "I save this one"? I only wrote one of these; it was indeed a challenge(but fun). It was called "Neon Night", if you're interested. Just saying.
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Kurt Ravidas
Date: 4/23/2019 2:46:00 PM
Jesus, shame on me( Perhaps, I'd follow your advice about six-lines. Thank you very much, Dale. Neon Night is awaiting me)
Date: 4/23/2019 10:42:00 AM
Lovely reflections Kurt. This form is challenging. I have only written one of them. You did well. Best of luck in the contest. : )
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Kurt Ravidas
Date: 4/23/2019 12:12:00 PM
Thank you for reading me, Connie. It was interesting to write an urban sonnet)

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