Permission To Paradise

My memory is obsolete in fashion:
the short blue skirt I saw you in that day
is out of date eons ago. My passion
has cicatrized from when you went away,
but thrifty memory still stores your grey
T-shirt with spots of oil paint, your beret

of modern artist that you used to wear 
coquettishly aslant, the bag across 
your chest, the thuya needle in your hair,
the band-aid on your knee, the minty gloss
on your sweet cherry lips, the silky moss
under your pliant back, the sassy moth

around my stupid head, the distant laughter,
the flash of bliss, the willow’s leaf embossed
on your left buttock and the most sought after
remembrance of the panties that you lost
in ferns in haste… One day I will exhaust
my recollections but at any cost

I save this one, unclouded and precise,
as my permission to the paradise.

22.04.2019
Urban Sonnet Poetry Contest
Emile Pinet
Copyright © | Year Posted 2019

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Lindley Avatar
April 23, 2019 at 6:10 PM
I have never written a sonnet in this form but yours is truly a very beautiful creation! A definite fav for me my friend..
Ravidas Avatar
April 23, 2019 at 6:22 PM
Thank you very much, Robert. Your encouraging words sound to me as a heavenly music)
Krutsinger Avatar
April 23, 2019 at 5:15 PM
I have not attempted this contest, but I imagine this is a terrific entry!
Ravidas Avatar
April 23, 2019 at 5:40 PM
Oddly enough, but I wrote it relatively fast. Usually, it takes me long. Thank you, Caren.
Cozart Avatar
April 23, 2019 at 2:16 PM
Just as a thought, your poem might be easier to read as three six-line stanzas and a final couplet. Also, do you mean "band-aid" and "I save this one"? I only wrote one of these; it was indeed a challenge(but fun). It was called "Neon Night", if you're interested. Just saying.
Ravidas Avatar
April 23, 2019 at 2:46 PM
Jesus, shame on me( Perhaps, I'd follow your advice about six-lines. Thank you very much, Dale. Neon Night is awaiting me)
Marcum Wong Avatar
April 23, 2019 at 10:42 AM
Lovely reflections Kurt. This form is challenging. I have only written one of them. You did well. Best of luck in the contest. : )
Ravidas Avatar
April 23, 2019 at 12:12 PM
Thank you for reading me, Connie. It was interesting to write an urban sonnet)
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