Perfect Symmetry

A house with perfect symmetry Lodged behind a willow tree Seeing all that goes around Firmly dug into the ground People have not lived in it Silent watching as it sits Holding many memories Keeping perfect symmetry

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Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/2/2013 3:43:00 PM

Consider changing holding to Anticipating. No one has lived in the house so it currently has nothing to hold. I like the imagery it makes me think of the house people dreamed of in the 50-60s with manicured yard and a white picket fence. The house will attempt to maintain the future Chaos within it's perfect symmetry. This has the structure to warrant a sequel.

Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper
Date: 8/2/2013 4:26:00 PM

Ah, Rick, you pick another one of the "old guard" my friend. Ha, I was riding the city bus home from school when I passed this house I use to see everyday. For so reason on that day I decided to write on it -right there on the bus. Crazy! A sequel huh, yeah maybe. I'll throw around some ideas! Thanks Again Rick! MC