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Peek a Boo

Shy sun is playing peek a boo as she hides behind the blushing moon



MONOKU: "PICK A PICTURE WHAT CHA' SEE" Contest
Image 3 chosen

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17-syllables checked with how many syllables

4/3/18

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Andrea Dietrich

April 21, 2018 at 5:06 PM

Congrats on your GREAT win, Jan. I was happy to see so many winners!

Paul Callus

April 21, 2018 at 3:20 PM

Your eclipse monoku is poetically presented, Jan! Congratulations on your top placement! Hugs // paul

Kim Rodrigues

April 21, 2018 at 9:45 AM

Congrats!

Jan Allison

April 21, 2018 at 10:32 AM

Thanks Kim:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

April 21, 2018 at 6:29 AM

- Congratulations on your 1st place in the contest, Jan :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison

April 21, 2018 at 7:11 AM

Thanks so much Anne:-) hugs jan xx

Susan Gentry

April 21, 2018 at 12:29 AM

Congratulations on your win! Well done.

Jan Allison

April 21, 2018 at 3:29 AM

Thanks Susan:-) hugs Jan xx

Line Gauthier

April 20, 2018 at 11:36 PM

Lovely, Jan. Congrats on your well deserved win. Well done.

Jan Allison

April 21, 2018 at 3:28 AM

Thanks Line:-) hugs Jan xx

FJ Thomas

April 8, 2018 at 12:06 PM

Blushing moon ....perfect Jan :)

Jan Allison

April 21, 2018 at 3:28 AM

Thanks Flo:-) hugs Jan xx

Marc Acrich

April 6, 2018 at 3:36 PM

No wonder you like my poems We write aloke Im a bit of story teller like you Only difernce is you understnd differnt kind of poetry Me i only do prose I have a few long stories in poem form and at one time i did weite stries they are there In anotjer section callled stries some are a crack up Im glad i fially made the effort to tead your cool poetry

Jan Allison

April 6, 2018 at 3:41 PM

Thanks Marc, I guess I do tell a story in some of my poems but I've never written a short story and i don't think I've written prose:-) hugs jan xx

Jean Murray

April 6, 2018 at 7:02 AM

I got as far as downloading the photo, then went blank. This is a winner for sure Jan.

Jan Allison

April 6, 2018 at 7:08 AM

Thanks Jean, I'm sure you will come up with something just give your muse a little time:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

April 4, 2018 at 7:23 PM

CUTE!! I clicked on that picture and found out it was the first total eclipse of blue moon like for over a hundred years!!!

Jan Allison

April 5, 2018 at 12:51 PM

The pic is awesome for inspiration Andrea:-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

April 4, 2018 at 1:46 PM

- Lovely and sweet, Jan :) - Luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison

April 4, 2018 at 1:48 PM

Thanks Anne Lise:-) hugs Jan xx

Roy Pett

April 4, 2018 at 12:15 PM

Brilliant Jan, love this monoku, good luck in contest. :))

Jan Allison

April 4, 2018 at 12:18 PM

Thanks Roy:-) hugs jan xx

Richard Lamoureux

April 4, 2018 at 8:32 AM

Wow!you nailed it. Should I say congrats now?

Jan Allison

April 4, 2018 at 8:40 AM

Aww thanks Rick, I reserve judgement on any contest place these days lol a win is a bonus and means the poem gets a little more exposure:-) hugs Jan xx

Line Gauthier

April 3, 2018 at 10:53 PM

Fun one-liner, Jan.

Jan Allison

April 4, 2018 at 4:47 AM

Thanks Line:-) hugs Jan xx

Matthew Anish

April 3, 2018 at 10:39 PM

Enjoyable short poem! Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Jan Allison

April 4, 2018 at 4:48 AM

Thanks so much Matthew:-) hugs jan xx

Winged Warrior

April 3, 2018 at 8:31 PM

We all hide behind the moon...but your monoku is right up front Jan...best of luck my friend...^WW^

Jan Allison

April 4, 2018 at 4:48 AM

Thanks ^WW^:-) hugs jan xx

Cheryl Hoffman

April 3, 2018 at 7:44 PM

Awesome moon/sun imagery in this peek a boo poem Jan~Good luck in the contest!~hugs Che :)

Jan Allison

April 4, 2018 at 4:49 AM

Thanks Che, just a fun one liner:-) hugs jan xx

Caren Krutsinger

April 3, 2018 at 7:09 PM

Shy sun and blushing moon; I would never have put them together, yet, this feels so right!

Jan Allison

April 3, 2018 at 7:11 PM

Thanks Caren, that's the beauty of poetic licence i hope mine wont get revoked lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Laura Leiser

April 3, 2018 at 6:23 PM

Yes, like hide and seek! Great Monoku, Jan! Enjoyed :)

Jan Allison

April 3, 2018 at 6:27 PM

Thanks Laura, I think the contest will fill very quickly, yours is the first one I've read using the flower image and is excellent:-) hugs Jan xx

Gershon Wolf

April 3, 2018 at 4:39 PM

The very essence of cuteness in the most positive sense of that word! Kudos, Jan! :) Gershon

Jan Allison

April 3, 2018 at 4:48 PM

Thanks Gershon:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane

April 3, 2018 at 1:01 PM

Well, isn't that just lover lee. You and Dale are sharing the same wave length.

Jan Allison

April 3, 2018 at 1:12 PM

Yes we are both mooning and spooning lol:-) hugs jan xx

Poet Tacito

April 3, 2018 at 10:59 AM

This gave me goosebumps. Nice lines!

Jan Allison

April 3, 2018 at 11:03 AM

Drake you have made my day! Thank you so much for your lovely comment:-) hugs Jan xx

Sakshi Singh

April 3, 2018 at 10:09 AM

i have never thought in this way..what a great monoku!!

Jan Allison

April 3, 2018 at 10:17 AM

Thanks Sakshi:-) hugs Jan xx

Mike Gentile

April 3, 2018 at 7:41 AM

beautiful Monoku, Jan perfect for the pic xxoo

Jan Allison

April 3, 2018 at 7:42 AM

Thanks Mike and the sun is finally coming out to play hee:-0 hugs jan xx

Tom Cunningham

April 3, 2018 at 7:39 AM

A lovely line Jan ,can just see the smiley sun behind, Wish it wouldn't be so shy here lol. Tom

Jan Allison

April 3, 2018 at 7:41 AM

It's shining here now Tom and drying up all the rain we've had over the last few days:-) hugs jan xx

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