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The raptor and the peacock hence, Sit pensive on a rambling fence. The first, inclined to be the host, Jumped down to claim the nearest post. The pea averse to snubs or quailing Moves closer on the weathered railing. Both immersed in trailing thoughts Mused on nigh, and what was naught. The Pea fans its tail in public splendor Cramped raptor prefers an opposing gender. He clasps a plume of gleaming thread To implant it on his own stark head. On and on, a grueling day Feathers plucked; cold work at play. Peafowl’s once featured feathered shafts Now forlornly bare and subject to draft. The predacious bird, a cocky thief Snidely at par, to a native chief. Clips of sun reveal a shadowy bane The unlikely pair cast as one and the same

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Date: 4/11/2019 12:00:00 AM
Hi Michelle...just dropped by to tell you I really enjoyed reading this poem today...so clever and entertaining.
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Date: 9/30/2017 4:36:00 PM
Cleverly written, I loved it. Seems you haven't been around a while like me. Well maybe I have a whole new life to write about. who knows why we get burned out writing. Thanks for the attention you gave me sometime ago when I wasn't watching. Some how I trust you'll get this in time. But let me read more of you as you did mine.
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Date: 6/29/2017 4:17:00 AM
Impressed by your poems and also by the unexpected and undeserved brilliant comments. Well, there is a saying in The Little Prince (by Saint Exupery), something like: ”You must know many caterpillars till recognize the butterfly”. I am just a caterpillar,yet.
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Michelle Mac Donald
Date: 3/24/2018 2:23:00 PM
T'is a beautiful quote; merci Ovidiu!:) “A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral.” From "Le Petit Prince"...it is all about perspective. A butterfly fluttering about takes no time to see himself.
Date: 5/15/2017 2:11:00 PM
A marvelous poem, Michelle. This is my debut foray into your creative works. This splendid poem reveals you to be a storyteller extraordinaire. A 7 for such top notch poetry. May love light your path always. Romantic Warrior
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Date: 5/23/2017 11:26:00 AM
Thank you for the blessing, Freddie, this is one I can share with many!:)
Date: 12/26/2016 1:07:00 PM
Well, kind of Raptor was I, once: I liked noisy kids playing around, Calling me as Tom cat:Pounce!Pounce! Kind of happy dinosaur on the ground, Dreaming to play, in a sunny,sunny day; But innocent times like Mary-go-round No times-feathers of Peacock flying away.
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Michelle Mac Donald
Date: 6/19/2017 1:51:00 PM
They are loud and noisy birds, but elegant in their own feathery ways. Ovidiu I hope to see more of your writes, wanting to know that you weren't swept away.
Date: 10/2/2016 6:57:00 PM
I am convinced I need to read this one many many times to find each piece of the puzzle and create the succinct picture you painted. I love the flow, the sound and its implications. Definitely a fav.
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Date: 9/23/2016 3:58:00 AM
What a great flow you have in this well-penned poem, Mickie. Stripped of feathers (or fur), animals' appearances change greatly. I'm not on the soup often, but I want to read more of your work. Consider me a new fan!
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Date: 9/30/2016 9:27:00 AM
I love the flora and fauna. God has gifted nature; she is a masterful painter and an adroit sculptor. Each thing has it's function and purpose. Have always been a quiet though genuine fan of yours, Carolyn.:) Keep well, wishing you the best! Hugs, Mikki
Date: 9/11/2016 11:57:00 AM
Forgot I wrote Saying Goodbye to Summer. These days my inspiration is stagnant. What I am really interested in now is art. Art and poetry are so closely knit. Most are including pictures with their poems. This I don't agree with because it locks a reader's imagination. I fear this is the coming thing though. Hope you are doing well and are happy. Your comments are so intellectual, I yearn for some more poetry from your inventive mind. A fauvist hug for you. Dave
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Michelle Mac Donald
Date: 9/12/2016 6:23:00 PM
Hi Daver :) Including pictures with poetry can enhance what's written, or fill spaces where the words couldn't reach. I often draw as I write, equivalent to a muse belch, I suppose. The drawings are abstract and unrelated. 'Un Pause Café' that keeps my muse from drifting off. I'll write to you via Pony Express, I promise!! Best wishes and hugs to you all!!! Love, Mikki
Date: 9/7/2016 5:19:00 AM
Wonderful imagism with much feeling and deep thought on what happens in our world to Peacocks and Predators.
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Michelle Mac Donald
Date: 9/8/2016 9:48:00 AM
Thank you, Ovidiu.:)
Date: 8/23/2016 12:21:00 PM
Very nice story on Peacocks and Predators. Beautifully done my friend. Hugs, Cloudy poet, bl
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Michelle Mac Donald
Date: 8/25/2016 11:09:00 AM
may the gravity of our troubles, never anchor our spirit to the ground.
Date: 7/13/2016 3:37:00 PM
story teller extraordinary love this...
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Date: 6/22/2016 1:50:00 PM
Hi, Mikki. I put an envelope in the mail yesterday - my poems on Greek themes. I wouldn't send you must anything, but these got a very good revue from a publisher a few years ago. Unfortunately, he said there was not much market for Greek poetry these days. He did offer to go half expenses with me if I wanted to publish. At my age I don't want to have to peddle books. Love and hugs, daver
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Date: 6/22/2016 7:32:00 PM
I can't wait to read these poems, Daver! I also have something here, that is more you than myself; though I did listen to the music watching the ballet. Your gift will be more special to me, but this one will have you smiling. I miss emailing you...everything is followed by a story. :) Love and hugs to you, Daver! Mikki
Date: 6/19/2016 11:13:00 AM
Thanking you again for the nice presents. I have one ready to send your way which I hope you will like. Big Old Love and Hugs, daver
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Date: 6/14/2016 10:28:00 AM
Thank you so much for the beautiful statue and the wonderful napkins. Kapyatie? Was she a a Greek Goddess? I don't know the name. And what is the occasion? Doesn't really matter - it was just so sweet of you to think of me in such lovely terms. The statue must have been hurt by invaders because it has no arms. E-mail me and tell me all about it. Hope you are doing o.k. Sending arm fulls of hugs and love. daver
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Date: 6/15/2016 6:49:00 PM
Not fun for Kapyatie, I hadn't haggled for the price, but I did mention she was missing an arm.:) Greek, yes, I think she'd been a goddess who loved children, and nature? When I'd seen it had reminded me of 'Iliad'. Keep well, stay safe! Love and hugs, Mikki
Date: 6/2/2016 8:35:00 PM
Hey, get some new poems up!! I have just a little time but will give a quick look to see if I have missed anything lately.
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Date: 5/30/2016 9:39:00 AM
Lewis Carol would love this one, me too. Hugs a bundle. daver
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Michelle Mac Donald
Date: 5/31/2016 7:02:00 PM
I had tried posting an image of the South African raptor. It's a poem in itself.:) I wonder if the feathers can flatten, as though it had used brill cream? Could give him the Great Gatsby look?
Date: 5/26/2016 11:53:00 AM
glamourous and wonderful. What a majestic long awaited comeback, I in person have been hoping to read a fresh masterpiece from a friend I have so missed. A definite and powerful 7
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Michelle Mac Donald
Date: 5/27/2016 8:09:00 PM
It's not so fresh, Funom...I'd written this in 2003. :) I'm sorry I hadn't kept up with my readings and writes. Having lost some of my poems, I thought I'd better post instead of losing these parts of my own timeline.
Date: 5/18/2016 11:00:00 AM
Yes. Quite an unlikely pair. The second time through is even better than the first. Predacious - a very eloquacious word. the definition of my word is a word with eloquence. I can just see that pile of feathers. A raptorous hug, daver
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Date: 5/17/2016 2:26:00 PM
Oh that nasty old raptor! The last line tells a grueling story of a Jurassic beast in all his glory. For my money the tale is a wee bit gory. Seriously, dear Mikki, this work has met all my expectations of superb writing. You are devlish clever. Love and hugs from daver, your admirer
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Date: 5/8/2016 6:44:00 PM
Hello Mikki!! Thanks once again for your read of my "Poetic Encryption" epic posted earlier today. I read your "Peacocks and Predators" here several times with rapt attention. The depth and precision of this Imagism write is as marvelous as it is truly captivating. The power and imagery of in this poem are indeed quite revealing. Outstanding Work!! This one is a 7+++ and is a FAV for sure!! Keep up the great writing here -- you're very talented for sure. Cheers and Best, Gary
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Date: 5/8/2016 4:52:00 PM
wow, this is a CLEVER one. very unique and out of the box too. Great writing, Michelle.
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Date: 5/7/2016 7:23:00 PM
This is really good. Really good. "Cramped raptor prefers an opposing gender"...hahaha. This one pulled me right in and kept me entertained start to finish. Easy 7 from me. -G
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Michelle Mac Donald
Date: 5/8/2016 3:53:00 AM
Thank you -G :)
Date: 5/7/2016 7:17:00 PM
Brilliant Mikki, I will put it into my favourites. Please finish it though, it is to good a work to lie incomplete. Love Shane xxx
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Michelle Mac Donald
Date: 5/8/2016 4:00:00 AM
Thank you! I've sent you a link to this bird...I'm not sure if it's for real or if it's like the jackalope. I'm not sure about that one, we'd sent postcards with that rabbit the front.