Peace - (Triple Tanka)

I'd like to believe
Peace is a natural state
That war is foreign
But I see war after war
And brother slaying brother

Old sacrifice young
Our youth gone before their day
Then I want to cry
For thought that they gain nothing
Are lost through their innocence

What a wonder    youth
How pliable and pristine
They want but to shine
While all the burnt-out old men
Pull the strings from their armchairs
Copyright © | Year Posted 2008

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November 20, 2010 at 7:00 PM
Another creative poem from you to read today. Congratulations on having this one featured. Keep on writing my friend. Wishing you ongoing success. Karen
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November 16, 2010 at 5:42 AM
This poem is really good!
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November 15, 2010 at 10:58 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved poetry being featured this week Daver. Love, Carol
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November 14, 2010 at 2:33 PM
Congrats Dave on your featured poem this week on the Soup.. a special piece to share with us all with luv this happy Sunday ..luv..
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May 9, 2010 at 10:13 AM
Hey, why don't you get some new poems up for heaven sake!!! hahahaha (I keep forgetting where i left off here on this back page!)
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May 9, 2010 at 10:12 AM
those last two lines, so awesome and powerful, DAver. And the whole poem is just great. Yes, I have been told sonnets are my forte. Except I was born in a century that simply does not care about them, Daver. Glad you enjoyed Keeper of the Beast, you little Beastie you. LUv, andrea
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August 9, 2008 at 11:01 AM
In the Bible it says there will always be war and rumors of war, so there will never be peace until Jesus sets up His Kingdom, but we do have to try and bring peace in any way we can. this was a great messge and i enjoyed it. thank you for reading Frog Kissing Booth and for your comment
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August 5, 2008 at 12:55 PM
What a thought provoking poem. Love the last two lines--powerful way to end your thoughts. Thank you for sharing your talent with us and for your kind comments on my poem. Keep on writing! Have a nice day! Karen
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August 3, 2008 at 1:03 PM
Reminds me of the song:"Where have all the flowers gone?" This is very well written and very sad and mournful. I really enjoyed reading this fine poem. Regards Heidie
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August 3, 2008 at 5:39 AM
Daver, this is brilliant. How did I miss this masterpiece??? LOVE the last 2 lines, how bright youth burns, and how bright the light at the end...too bad it get's lost by some...I just love this so much - love Kristin
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August 2, 2008 at 11:02 AM
Fighting for peace is an oxymoron, just like "holy" war. Good write. I was talking about Obama's speech when he stated "We are no longer a Christian Nation" and Michelle Obama's anti-white thesis written while she attended Princeton University (on a full, we paid for it, scholarship). If those type of racist views are allowed we will be no better off than we were in the pre-civil rights days. It's ashame we can't look at a neighbor and just see a neighbor, neither black no white. Vince
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July 31, 2008 at 2:12 AM
Absolutely, I cannot believ what our world has ecome, the violence, the bloodshed, and no one blinks an eyelid.It is so sad, well done. Peace Fathima
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July 30, 2008 at 2:18 PM
I think your next to last line was way too kind. Your words are full of truth. It infuriates me and breaks my heart at the same time. I am too emotional on this subject. A wonderful write. Thanks Daver for always answering my questions in your comments. You are an awesome poet and a most interesting person to know. Love, Shar
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July 30, 2008 at 1:09 PM
Daver, Oh so true. You know I believe war to be a disease. A spiritual cancer that turns love into hate. So many suffer needlessly. Eons it will take before innocense is protected. May our troops come home in Godspeed. A hard write, needs to be said. Take care hun, blessings to you and your family. Love Light Truth Patricia
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