Paying Respects

another deep breath of suffocating air passes the lump in my throat... I offer a Kleenex to the woman beside me

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Raul Moreno

Date: 6/3/2010 8:40:00 PM

Profound and well written, you evoke great emotion. This is one for my favs...Raul

Iolanda Scripca

Date: 5/30/2010 4:34:00 PM

Wow! What an enigmatic place to render this emotion.Why was it dim? Why in the last row? Great Tanka, dear friend. Thanks for your comment. Love, Iolanda

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/29/2010 9:21:00 PM

very nice and congraulations. Don't think I had seen this one before!

Gert W. Knop

Date: 5/29/2010 5:29:00 AM

Nicely written Tanka, Carrie! Enjoyed reading it today. Thank you for your kind comments and have a nice Sunday!..Love, Gert

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 5/28/2010 9:09:00 AM

Congratulations on your win in Paula's " Feel The Feelings" contest Carrie. Love, Carol

Scarlett Sepulvado Anderson

Date: 5/26/2010 7:07:00 AM

I can really feel the emotion in this wonderful write. Hope you been doing great. Been away from soup with no internet but come as often as I can borrowing friends internet from time to time. Great to read poetry again from all my old friends from soup. Have a great day! Scarlett

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 5/25/2010 10:18:00 PM

This is such a moving write, Carrie...congrats on winning with this emotional piece...:)

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 5/25/2010 7:23:00 PM

Congrats Carrie on your 2nd place win in Paula's contest with this wonderful poem which I previously commented was spectacular.. luv.. Linda-Marie..