Patina

smoothness imbued with character his essence imbedded deeply in every crevice sweet oils of everyday labor lubricating its monotony burnishing the hard patina of life ©6/29/2018 for Patina Poetry Contest

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Susan Gentry

Date: 7/4/2018 10:54:00 PM

Congratulations on your win with this wonderful poem. Well done and in few words. :)

Line Gauthier

Date: 7/4/2018 10:35:00 PM

Congrats on your win, John. Well done.

Eve Roper

Date: 7/4/2018 2:46:00 PM

Wonderful poem, John, love the way you used the word "patina".. excellent .. Congratulations on your win... Hugs Eve

Susan Ashley

Date: 7/3/2018 6:03:00 PM

John, a poem of metaphoric beauty of living life and wearing the 'wear and tear' well. Wondrously expressed in so few words! Congratulations on your excellent win!.. Warmest wishes ~Susan

Carrie Richards

Date: 7/3/2018 2:56:00 PM

Ahh.....I love the simplicity and the comparisons ....just perfectly executed John !! Well done!

Gershon Wolf

Date: 7/3/2018 2:32:00 PM

I loved the way this poem soared and then 'returned to earth' at the end... Very, very nice, John! ~ Gershon … P.S. And how 'bout Charlie's comment?! Can you beat that?!

Sandra Haight

Date: 7/1/2018 5:51:00 PM

Amazing metaphors for life, John. Short but so powerful. Best wishes for the contest. Sandra

John Lawless
Date: 7/5/2018 4:52:00 PM

Thanks Sandra, it has been said that men are not born they are made, thanks for stopping to read and comment

Charlie Smith

Date: 6/30/2018 9:13:00 AM

Sometimes confused as rust, well done John...

John Lawless
Date: 7/5/2018 4:50:00 PM

C'mon Charlie, a little rust adds character to an otherwise commonplace shovel....

Lyric Man

Date: 6/30/2018 7:16:00 AM

Hi John.. So glad I had the opportunity to read your interesting, patina poem this morning (good luck in the contest). I'm heading home from a road gig today and won't have this chance again for a while. Happy Weekend!

John Lawless
Date: 7/5/2018 4:49:00 PM

Hey, thanks for stopping by....hope you had a great forth....