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Patches the Tennesee Walker

Blue's Magic Patches_Patches for short
What great magical horse with gait
Smooth ride but young unexperienced
Going to ride today  for air is cool 

Saddled up ready to go beyond_
Beyond those hills that are snow-capped
Exciting time of freedom to get away
Our day to bond and learn area

So much to see and visit over hills
And across dale_ at small stream stop
To let Patches drink and rest a bit
While I take some mid-day nourishment

Crepuscular clouds forming over toward
The hills threatening first snowfall
On the dales and valleys probably
Snow to cover land like the mountains

One snowflake falls as remount
Touches Patches' nose
Patches gives his reign a shake
Terror in his eyes as snow falls

Darken skies _ Patches becomes more  terrified
Rearing up in terror_hold on with all might
Patches runs and runs trying to outrun snow
So young__he just doesn't know....

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 10/29/2010 1:24:00 AM
wonderful point here thank you duncan
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Date: 10/25/2010 8:57:00 AM
Poor Patches, trying to "outrun snow"!!!Lovely imagery you've penned here, Sara and a great entry for Constance's contest! Enjoyed the read! And thank you for all your kind comments!...Gert
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Date: 10/24/2010 2:03:00 PM
What a terrific entry for Constance's contest, Sara! I can just imagine Patches try to "outrun snow." Beautiful imagery! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 10/23/2010 2:38:00 PM
Lovely piece Sara.. so very alive in every line.. good luck in the contest my friend.. u have made the horse alive and breathtaking to the reader.. happy weekend ...
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Date: 10/23/2010 2:24:00 PM
If you had trouble with commenting on me sorry I accidentally hit the block button. I got it straight now.
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Date: 10/23/2010 10:10:00 AM
Very wonderful write if it is for the contest, sara
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Date: 10/23/2010 9:05:00 AM
Beautiful my Dear! => Keep writeing! You are wonderful at it! =>
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Date: 10/23/2010 8:54:00 AM
wonderful, Sara so patches is not just a magic imagination. enjoyed te little tale here, nice painted picture comes to mind,..p.d.
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Date: 10/23/2010 8:26:00 AM
We did have a horse like this...I did not ride him much..We don't have very much snow in the south so I am almost positive that it did not snow while we had him..I still need to work on this one...I don't know if it would be considered Free Verse or if I need to work on a rhyme scheme..Give some advice..Sara
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