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First a twinkle in her daddy’s eye
Hypnotized
By the rhythm of her hips 
Momma’s hips
Gripping, tugging, releasing him
Encouraging the venom 
Pulsating, quaking: 
The laxative 
Voyaging through the passages

Welcome to the world
A brand new baby girl!
Simple mind under the curls
Just sucks on her bo-bo   
She speaks her first words 
And then before you know
She’s preparing for her classes
The sequel to her passage

Graduation day 
For this bright young female
A glory to her story 
Tears of joy from received hail
Onto the next chapter 
Because it’s feat that she’s after
Enlisted to manage ravage
The Atlantic is her passage

Presented to the tasks
Of a female soldier
Doesn’t think 
Solely follow’s her superior’s orders
Was assigned to convoy duty
When she and her platoon were blasted
A tragedy 
A disaster
A catalyst in her final passage


I'd love to hear Common recite this rap

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 6/20/2012 7:00:00 AM
Well done Brittany!
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Date: 6/17/2012 1:56:00 PM
sorry for the duplication... it's STILL a magnificent poem!
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Date: 6/17/2012 1:54:00 PM
Brilliantly conceived and rendered! A story of hope and achievement, ending in grief and sorrow... Well done, Brittany!! Best wishes, Keith
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Date: 6/7/2012 11:50:00 AM
I'D LOVE TO HEAR YOU RECITE IT...NO ONE CAN DO A BETTER JOB THAN YOU WHEN IT COMES TO WATS WRITTEN FROM THE HEART
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Date: 6/5/2012 6:32:00 PM
SOUP MAIL!!!!!!
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Date: 6/5/2012 4:21:00 PM
An extraordinary piece with an apt title, rich in imagery and language but with a catastrophic ending. Nicely rhymed and beautifully constructed! Well done Britanny!! Best wishes, Keith
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Justcallme Britt
Date: 6/5/2012 4:25:00 PM
It is so nice hearing from you, Keith! Thank you <3
Date: 6/5/2012 12:15:00 PM
Brittany a warm welcome to PoetrySoup I offer to you. I wish for you the best in your writing endeavors whatever they may be. May you find inspiration by reading some of the poetry written here by other poets. May the sun shine on you that you might find great joy in your lif . Love, Carol
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Date: 6/5/2012 8:47:00 AM
hey girl you excites my mind,great write
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Justcallme Britt
Date: 6/5/2012 9:03:00 AM
Thank you, Richard :)
Date: 6/5/2012 5:43:00 AM
After reading all these comments I couldn't help but to agree with them!!! The rhythm was EXCELLENT!!! The presentation is perfect...and very heartfelt!!!
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Justcallme Britt
Date: 6/5/2012 8:32:00 AM
Thank you :)
Date: 6/4/2012 9:49:00 PM
WOW,SMH you just blew my mind.This is what you call a good poem. STUPENDOUS WRITE!!!!!ON MY WAY TO READ MORE!!!!!
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Justcallme Britt
Date: 6/4/2012 9:53:00 PM
Very flattering hearing this from one of my favorite poets! :D
Date: 6/4/2012 8:43:00 PM
How awful was her last passage! I really enjoyed this one and I hope it does well in the contest. very creative.
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Justcallme Britt
Date: 6/4/2012 8:51:00 PM
Thank you very much, Andrea :)
Date: 6/4/2012 7:20:00 PM
love it... nicely written..good luck in the contest....always....Joseph
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Justcallme Britt
Date: 6/4/2012 7:40:00 PM
Thank you for wishing me good luck, Joseph :)
Date: 6/4/2012 6:52:00 PM
An excellent poem for the contest, a sure winner.
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Justcallme Britt
Date: 6/4/2012 7:41:00 PM
You really think so? That mean's so much! :D
Date: 6/4/2012 5:01:00 PM
Brittany, very cool,,Today I'm reading poems from my aunt PD's account, hope you don't mind. Sincerely pd's niece SYLVIA }!{
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Justcallme Britt
Date: 6/4/2012 5:10:00 PM
Of course I don't mind! Hope you enjoy all of the poems you read <3

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