John Lawless Poet Dodoitsu

Part 2 - Fully Booked

Her train arrived right on time
a presence lost in the crowd
love’s interminable end
Eleven minutes


6/22/2016

-Eleven Minutes (Paolo Coehlo)

submitted to – Part 2, Fully Booked – Poetry Contest
sponsor – Nette Onclaud

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Nette Onclaud June 26, 2016 at 10:29 AM love this poignant slice- of- life moment, john... incredible!.. thanks for joining my contest and cheery congrats!..huggs John Lawless June 26, 2016 at 10:56 AM Thanks Nette, always and honor to place in one of your contests. Thank you also for taking the time to sponsor such interesting themed contest.

Andrea Dietrich June 26, 2016 at 9:37 AM wow, I LOVE this, John. Glad to see it among the winners. Congratulations John Lawless June 26, 2016 at 10:55 AM Thanks Andrea, I wasn't sure if it would catch Nette's eye but one can never tell.

Karam Misra June 25, 2016 at 9:02 PM Congrats on your win, John. ~karam~ John Lawless June 26, 2016 at 10:53 AM Thanks Karam, appreciate your comment

John Lawless June 24, 2016 at 7:48 AM Thanks Wendy, glad you got it. I thought it might be a bit "oblique" in its meanings.

Wendy Rycroft June 24, 2016 at 1:48 AM Good write john I can just picture it x John Lawless June 26, 2016 at 10:52 AM OOps...Wendy, I posted my response as a comment...see above.