parasol

lone parasol stroll
   leaves and lady dressed in red—
       grayed man misses youth

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David Crandall

Date: 9/9/2025 4:14:00 PM

Nice imagery. I can picture it, and I can also relate to one of the characters, but I'll leave that as a mystery

Ron VanHooser

Date: 9/6/2025 1:36:00 PM

I like it that you leave it to your audience to envsion what happens, if anything between these two. This is intrigueing, nothing else is needed, leave it to the reader, I love it.

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/7/2025 8:30:00 AM

Dear Ron, I value your beautiful comments and the way you enjoy the freedom of poetic interplay and interpretation between the poem and the reader. Less is more in poetry. Sometimes I tend to overdo my imagery, so I truly value your assessment. Thank you for your kindness and encouragement. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 9/4/2025 7:48:00 AM

I feel nostalgia for the colorful parasols of yore. Your poem has a tinge of romance that is charming.

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/7/2025 8:26:00 AM

Dear Hilda, I treasure your beautiful comments. I feel nostalgia for parasols too, they're so lovely. Thank you for your gracious visit. Your poetic spirit brightens my page. Warmest wishes, my dear poet friend.. ~Susan

Paige Hind

Date: 8/30/2025 7:52:00 PM

A true and enduring thought- you put the words into his mouth, I bet :)

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/7/2025 8:23:00 AM

Dear Paige, it's wonderful to see you! Thank you for your wonderful thoughts and for your gracious visit. I imagine older men do wish for their youth again in certain scenarios as older women do too... to act on lust and to be lusted after.. ah, the muse of a poet lol! Warmest wishes, my dear poet friend.. ~Susan

Tom Woody

Date: 8/30/2025 1:45:00 PM

Ooh nice contrast presented in so few words, representing moods and/or stations in present life. He was red, once

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/7/2025 8:16:00 AM

Dear Tom, I'm so glad you noticed the contrast in the mood and stage of life. Indeed, "he was red, once".. I adore your recognition of this. I just wish the judge would have valued that too... oh well, what cha gonna do? Thank you for your valuable feedback. You're an encouraging and perceptive poet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Suze