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Paradise Lost

Today I could feel only burning salty tears of sadness Alone as I walked slowly along the beach pondering Sweet memories pervading my inner psyche deeply With coiling inside gasps of heavy breathless moans Sweetest honey holding precious memories so real Faraway looking into the sun setting warm—a utopia As a special friendship was born under a sweet kiss While conjuring true a most incredible dream shone Visions flashback into far distant everlasting thoughts Full of smiles adoringly walking along the golden sands Feelings with joy as magical tunes are so divinely sung As large waves crash over and over in the mind’s eye True emotions burning with love stays forever so pure As tears fall upon the sand symbolizing a rapid change In realizing your very touch means and meant so much As salted heart burning flames stir unquenchable fires You who burns inside this candle lost in your very space Darling the happiest day of my life came on our meeting As I found you fortified in a castle of one mystic dream As whispers cast over the warm sea finding a true love Carnations lovely crowning petals of a most regal life with Beauty whose golden visage lights faraway sunsets so real While smiling gently and graciously before her—Our Queen Who seeks with tears and toil to restore our Paradise Lost Gary Bateman and Liam McDaid – A Collaborated Poem, Copyright © All Rights Reserved (June 6, 2015) (Unrhymed Quatrain)

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Date: 6/7/2015 2:43:00 PM
- Liam and Gary, a wonderful poem - "Visions flashback into distant father everlasting thoughts" .... love this line .... - It's having the courage to be who you are ... - I enjoy reading this poem .... of course a 7 + fav. - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 6/7/2015 1:49:00 PM
This is great guys...I really enjoyed it....Tim
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Date: 6/7/2015 7:27:00 AM
Hello Liam . . . Thanks Mate for posting our latest co-written poem here on "Paradise Lost." I really like how this one turned out -- all six quatrains just seem fall right into place. I really enjoyed working on this theme with you!! Best Wishes Pal!! Gary
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Date: 6/6/2015 9:00:00 PM
Hi Liam n' Gary!Another very beautiful passionate and captivating love poem penned by you my dearest friend Liam, and this time in collaboration with our mutual and very dear friend Gary.Very beautifully written!Just dazzling!A masterpiece.Very moved by it.A very beautiful romantic sweet piece filled of so much love tenderness, happiness,sadness,emotions,feelings,sweet and great memories,light,hopes and dreams to keep very close to my heart.smiling.Awesome collaboration!I enjoyed it so much.Superb imagery!A real gem!I love it.So beautiful.A 7+++ to each!A fav.Your pens are truly mighty golden!Wishing you a very lovely day!In his light!God bless you always!:)Love n' hugs!xoxox D.^O^
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