Paradise Lost

Today I could feel only burning salty tears of sadness 
Alone as I walked slowly along the beach pondering
Sweet memories pervading my inner psyche deeply 
With coiling inside gasps of heavy breathless moans
 
Sweetest honey holding precious memories so real
Faraway looking into the sun setting warm—a utopia
As a special friendship was born under a sweet kiss
While conjuring true a most incredible dream shone
 
Visions flashback into far distant everlasting thoughts
Full of smiles adoringly walking along the golden sands 
Feelings with joy as magical tunes are so divinely sung 
As large waves crash over and over in the mind’s eye 

True emotions burning with love stays forever so pure
As tears fall upon the sand symbolizing a rapid change 
In realizing your very touch means and meant so much 
As salted heart burning flames stir unquenchable fires 

You who burns inside this candle lost in your very space
Darling the happiest day of my life came on our meeting 
As I found you fortified in a castle of one mystic dream 
As whispers cast over the warm sea finding a true love

Carnations lovely crowning petals of a most regal life with
Beauty whose golden visage lights faraway sunsets so real
While smiling gently and graciously before her—Our Queen
Who seeks with tears and toil to restore our Paradise Lost

Gary Bateman and Liam McDaid – A Collaborated Poem,
Copyright © All Rights Reserved (June 6, 2015)
(Unrhymed Quatrain)
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Andresen Avatar
June 7, 2015 at 2:43 PM
- Liam and Gary, a wonderful poem - "Visions flashback into distant father everlasting thoughts" .... love this line .... - It's having the courage to be who you are ... - I enjoy reading this poem .... of course a 7 + fav. - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Smith Avatar
June 7, 2015 at 1:49 PM
This is great guys...I really enjoyed it....Tim
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June 7, 2015 at 7:27 AM
Hello Liam . . . Thanks Mate for posting our latest co-written poem here on "Paradise Lost." I really like how this one turned out -- all six quatrains just seem fall right into place. I really enjoyed working on this theme with you!! Best Wishes Pal!! Gary
Petersen Potter Avatar
June 6, 2015 at 9:00 PM
Hi Liam n' Gary!Another very beautiful passionate and captivating love poem penned by you my dearest friend Liam, and this time in collaboration with our mutual and very dear friend Gary.Very beautifully written!Just dazzling!A masterpiece.Very moved by it.A very beautiful romantic sweet piece filled of so much love tenderness, happiness,sadness,emotions,feelings,sweet and great memories,light,hopes and dreams to keep very close to my heart.smiling.Awesome collaboration!I enjoyed it so much.Superb imagery!A real gem!I love it.So beautiful.A 7+++ to each!A fav.Your pens are truly mighty golden!Wishing you a very lovely day!In his light!God bless you always!:)Love n' hugs!xoxox D.^O^
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