Pantoum

As deep stillness fills the evening air
Whispering leaves stirred by wind’s caress
The lowering sun gilds your auburn hair
The garden quietening now before night’s rest
 
Whispering leaves stirred by wind’s caress
The blackbird showers mellifluous his trill
The garden quietening now before night’s rest
You’re with me now and now my heart is still.
 
The blackbird showers mellifluous his trill
Joy rises in me like a quiet tide
You’re with me now and now my heart is still.
Could now be forever, this evening by your side.
 
Joy rises in me like a quiet tide
The lowering sun gilds your auburn hair
Could now be forever, this evening by your side.
As deep stillness fills the evening air.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2021

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Agustin Avatar
September 22, 2025 at 7:42 AM
Thanks for sharing this... exposing your thoughts through your unique poetic style. Meanwhile, I greet you with the love of the Lord, expressed by John 3:16 of the Bible, "For God so loved the world, that he gave his only begotten Son, that whosoever believeth in him should not perish, but have everlasting life." Be blessed.
Calasibetta Avatar
October 24, 2021 at 8:54 AM
HI Alan, a beautifully crafted poem,your skill at Pantoum is impressive.... Blessings, Paulette
Agustin Avatar
August 3, 2021 at 7:24 AM
Thanks for sharing this. God bless you. Welcome to PS.
Allison Avatar
August 2, 2021 at 2:01 PM
wow Alan, what a fabulous first poem on soup, the pantoum is such a challenging form and you wrote a beauty!:-) hugs Jan xx
Alex Avatar
August 1, 2021 at 10:48 AM
O My! Great Work!
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