Panorama of Primrose Promises Premiere Contest Winner

 In the valley 
    of violin vines,
    when the saffron sun ascends,
and crooning clouds 
   drift in mulberry cadence, 
I let my quivering quill harmonize
mystical moonbeams 
splattered across 
  hushed horizons~
with sparkling strings 
   of stardust,
as ink paints a 
   panorama of primrose promises, 
from spring scented 
    sonatas scattered 
in symphonic hues 
   of sangria syllables,
thawing 
    frost-clutched fauna,
while butterflies flutter
    amongst floating florals,
  depicting whispers 
of my hyacinth heartbeat.

But something about 
the way sakura 
   blossoms fall like rain,
traces picturesque 
  lines of my 
  lyrical confessions, 
composed like 
  a chromatic chorus,
that savors 
  kismet kisses,
of a love woven 
  with 
twinkling 
  tendrils in 
   tangerine twilight,
  and when you 
  return like 
 pirouetting jasmines,
I feel the 
 ambrosial aura 
of Persephone
      emerge from 
the darkest 
  caves of Hades,
bringing back 
 empyrean euphoria,
and here I let 
nature unfurl
a choir of 
 singing sunflowers 
  and waltzing wisterias,
performing 
  classical serenades,
amidst trumpet trees 
 sprouting ivory petals,
in dulcet idioms,
  veiling toxic tales.

But today, 
 as rays of gold 
  adorn my skyline,
I think of tender truth 
 transcribed in 
theatrical tunes,
 like 
 zenith of zealous zephyr
eternally rippling 
  blue rose breeze 
      across Monet’s 
          balmy meadow. 

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Date: 3/11/2024 6:19:00 PM
IE, the last stanza is very interesting. You thinking of Monet's meadow had me look at some reproductions of his art. So, I am visualizing what you described earlier as something like an abstract painting. What you did is unusual and made me think on a different level.
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Date: 3/11/2024 4:55:00 PM
You're going to win! (I think.) This alliteration you have going is absolutely breathtaking, Ink. Always a pleasure-
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Date: 3/9/2024 12:41:00 PM
I knew you would create an amazing sonata, Ink A winner for sure and a fave
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Date: 3/9/2024 9:53:00 PM
Awwn thats such a sweet comment dear andrea, i wasnt sure but im so happy to hear you thought so, talented soul, im grateful for your support
Date: 3/9/2024 12:23:00 PM
Dear Ink, your poem beautifully captures the way inspiration from nature and love is translated into artistic expression through imagery and language. Your diction is very expressive, painting a vivid picture. Poetic devices like alliteration ("crooning clouds drift in mulberry cadence"), metaphor ("sparkling strings of stardust"), and personification ("crooning clouds") evoke a sense of rhythm and visual elegance. Best wishes for the contest.
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Date: 3/9/2024 9:48:00 PM
Ah dr sotto what a detailed and wonderful comment that is, im always grateful for your kindness truly. Thank you so very much always
Date: 3/9/2024 11:58:00 AM
You are a spectacular artist of verse, Ink. I entered this poem as a conscious participant who is enjoying flowers, music, skyline and a beautiful Monet painting. Thank you for a journey.
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Date: 3/9/2024 9:48:00 PM
Awwn dear hilda you are so sweet and kind, im forever grateful for your generous and uplifting comments always. Thank you talented soul
Date: 3/9/2024 11:50:00 AM
As inspiring as blossoms of spring, reveling on winsome meadows-- a joy to read your poem, Ink. Awesome descriptions throughout like: I let my quivering quill harmonize mystical moonbeams splattered across hushed horizons~ with sparkling strings of stardust---like a chromatic chorus, that savors kismet kisses, of a love woven with twinkling tendrils in tangerine twilight--every poem you write is a FAVE--and so is this poem.
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Date: 3/9/2024 11:55:00 AM
Dear vijay; you are always so sincere and genuine with your feedback, and i feel and appreciate your kindness, grateful for your poetic presence, from the very beginning: humble too you are despite how talented you are. Thank you again. For the fave too
Date: 3/9/2024 10:38:00 AM
You are the mistress of adjectives, dear ink.. no one does them like you and your metaphors blow my mind.. Your poem is a mesmerising journey through the landscapes of nature and the depths of emotion, woven with intricate imagery and lyrical language that captivates the reader's senses. The opening lines set the stage in a valley of violin vines, where the atmosphere is painted with the colours of dawn and the music of clouds drifting in mulberry cadence... Your quivering quill harmonizes with the mystical moonbeams, creating a symphony of imagery that evokes a sense of wonder and enchantment.. BOl in the contest.
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Date: 3/9/2024 10:50:00 AM
Mistress of adjectives haha. Thats a good one. I think it’s not enough. I shud have splashed few more colors. Metaphors blow so many minds not in a good way tho. I feel sorry for them. Your comment is more poetic than my poem. You are walking talking poetry! Thank you so much dear silent one
Date: 3/9/2024 10:09:00 AM
..."love woven with twinkling tendrils in tangerine twilight"... (The forbidden verses) I feel like I am a fly captured by honeydew)...and the rest ...(and here comes the spring, inspiration, this is a taboo fling. Engulfing. Bewitching station. Sing Angel s sing ! ~ "A Masterpiece"
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Date: 3/9/2024 10:51:00 AM
thats a massive compliment coming from such a talented poet like you, thank you dear jude
Date: 3/9/2024 8:42:00 AM
valley of violin vines, when the saffron sun ascends,and crooning clouds drift in mulberry cadence, oooo that alliterative build up!!! butterflies flutter amongst floating florals, depicting whispers of my hyacinth heartbeat…damn .. sakura blossoms fall like rain, mmm in love with those imagery!! choir of singing sunflowers and waltzing wisterias, mmmm you know how to make my heart skip a beat papi… zenith of zealous zephyr eternally rippling blue rose breeze across Monet’s balmy meadow. damn, my heart has stopped.
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Date: 3/9/2024 8:45:00 AM
Oh no papi ur heart stopped? Lol thats bad news thank u for reading and leaving ur feedback
Date: 3/9/2024 8:35:00 AM
Brilliant! A beautiful poem. A favourite for me.
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Date: 3/9/2024 8:46:00 AM
Ah that means alot to me really thank you jeanette. Grateful
Date: 3/9/2024 8:29:00 AM
Like zenith of zealous zephyr. That line hit me … so nice
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Date: 3/9/2024 8:46:00 AM
Thanks dahlin
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