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Panic Attack

Tears fall like raindrops
My head is full to bursting
Someone please listen
Can’t you see that I’m struggling
I’m scared of a little mouse

08~29~14
Submitted to lament me a tanka contest
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Sara Kendrick

August 29, 2014 at 8:03 AM

They are nasty, scary little creatures..Way to go ...Reads like a winner to me..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

Jan Allison

August 29, 2014 at 8:10 AM

Thanks for dropping by as ever Sara:-) hugs jan xx

Tim Smith

August 28, 2014 at 11:10 PM

Lol...not much scare me...a rat maybe....hugs Tim

Jan Allison

August 29, 2014 at 4:05 AM

Is just a fun write Tim - I would be more scared of a love rat! Hugs Jan xxxx

Casarah Nance

August 28, 2014 at 9:13 PM

ha, you got me that last line, you are a sneaky poet, you real me in with a bit of cheese and catch me in your trap! I enjoyed this! :)

Jan Allison

August 29, 2014 at 4:04 AM

Hi Casarah I did a syllable check on it it showed 7 - grr - will alter it to make sure. thanks I think it depends which syllable checker you use:-) hugs Jan xx

Casarah Nance

August 28, 2014 at 9:14 PM

um-8 syllables in the can't u see i'm struggling line-should work if you take out "that"

Faye Gibson

August 28, 2014 at 7:16 PM

Very entertaining. Jan, do you stay up all night? To do all you do, I wonder when you sleep???

Jan Allison

August 28, 2014 at 7:20 PM

No Faye I do sleep but my sleep pattern has been very disturbed since my husband had his cancer surgery last year - it is now 1.16am but I had a rest for a couple of hours earlier. I am on school holiday at the moment so have time to be on here but next week it will all change LOL. Thanks for the lovely comment:-) hugs Jan xxx

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