Pain

Pain ~   ~   ~  pain
Invisible swimmer within blood and vein
Barbaric and callous
Dwells within corpuscles
Intrinsic and inescapable
Source of pool of tears
A lunatic clown that impairs muscles
Schizophrenic display when he batters bones
Free from arrests despite his cruelty
He aches with passion; death's sibling
Oh! don't visit me, friends and family
Comfortable one that renders comfortless all who
live
Smile suppressor; hope vaporizer
Rolling in bed and roars like a lion
Diverter of prayer for wealth desire
"Dear God please give me good health and vigor".

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Funom Makama

Date: 12/22/2015 7:54:00 AM

your discrete lines filled with sweet smelling ingredients so palatable to the mind are just beyond gratitude and appreciation. This page is a wonder and your poetry speaks volume of creativity beyond physical perspective. keep it up friend and this is definitely a 7.

Njeri Hunjeri

Date: 11/18/2015 1:07:00 PM

Pain with all its colors and appearances. very well described.

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 11/17/2015 6:32:00 AM

Excellent. Very deep write. Thanks for sharing it.

Michael Tor

Date: 11/11/2015 12:35:00 PM

Love the imagery. You really captured this feeling of pain! Excellent Afolabi. A7 my friend

James Inman

Date: 11/11/2015 6:50:00 AM

Very deep write, Afolabi. Well done.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 11/5/2015 10:10:00 PM

Invisible to see, but easy to spot on someone's face or mood. AM. I do hope you to be blessed. LOVE LINDA

Joe Maverick

Date: 11/5/2015 9:52:00 PM

This is most descriptive of the suffering many people must suffer Afolabi, I gives me pause for thought indeed..'

Kelly Deschler

Date: 11/3/2015 5:01:00 PM

Pain comes in many forms throughout life, and not letting pain take over our lives will ensure our happiness... These lines are powerful and deeply moving. Great expressive writing, A.M.!

Don Johnson

Date: 11/2/2015 3:15:00 PM

Health in life the important thing, nail on the head, hits thought to bring, greed for dollars the sadness sings, the wheel of time deplored...

Kp Nunez

Date: 11/1/2015 8:50:00 AM

Awesome metaphors, AM. You are very creative. PS. Did you mean God in your last line? hugs!

Maurice Rigoler

Date: 11/1/2015 8:09:00 AM

Love the 2nd line: Invisible swimmer within blood and vein! Very original. Thank you for reading about Flackmoth's dream. Best to you in your writing endeavors. / M

Len Gasun

Date: 10/31/2015 10:37:00 AM

An outstanding poem with so much truth about pain my very dear friend, A.M. My hats off for you. Thank you so much for sharing! Thank you so much as well for taking a lot of your precious time reading and re-reading one of my poems,leaving me a very wonderful and encouraging comment. So much appreciated. Have a blessed day! love lots and big hugs, Leonor

John Loving Iii

Date: 10/29/2015 3:47:00 PM

Superior vocabulary. A reminder of how blessed I am to be in good health. I loved the use of the phrase "deaths sibling" it gives a sence of being like a greek god. Keep up the good work.

Afolabi Muideen
Date: 10/30/2015 5:02:00 PM

Thank you for your pleasant words my friend.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/29/2015 3:44:00 PM

a lunatic clown. Loved that part. Yes, pain is a damn lunatic clown, the kind that frighten us and give nightmares to children. I hate the pain i get sometimes. Creative look at it!!

Afolabi Muideen
Date: 10/30/2015 4:59:00 PM

Thank you for dropping by Andrea, pain is really unwanted. Stay blessed friend......A.M.

Harry Horsman

Date: 10/29/2015 12:05:00 PM

An unique poem on pain, truly a wonderful rendering from your pen...

Afolabi Muideen
Date: 10/30/2015 4:56:00 PM

Thank you friend.

Paul Callus

Date: 10/29/2015 11:15:00 AM

A very expressive poem, Afolabi. Pain is never welcome, but we have to put up with it until it retreats. Love the end prayer to God. ~ All the best. // paul

Afolabi Muideen
Date: 10/30/2015 4:55:00 PM

Yes Paul we must not give up when it comes. Thank you for shopping......A.M.

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 10/29/2015 6:39:00 AM

A profound analysis of pain's presence in our life! Dynamic, analytic and beautiful writing! Pain is terrible my friend but also is a warning signal of protection to the organism! A seven +! Excellent work! Last line first good I think you mean God!

Afolabi Muideen
Date: 10/30/2015 4:53:00 PM

Thank you for dropping by Demetrio.

Afolabi Muideen
Date: 10/30/2015 4:52:00 PM

Thank you