Overtones

Allow me to confess how gratifying it is
To see the rainfall of lights permeate through your eyes,
Swirling lightening warmth into my own
To see your thoughtful lips curve into a summer's beam
We energize each other as our words fall like playful spring petals,
Expressing our hearts' joys without grievance or complaint
But with genuine feeling and mutual delight
Fastened tight with love's newfound might
Artistic minds mix, dispersing colors others barely fathom
Upon the surface of their distracted rights,
Their distant autumnal attentions
Instead we dream, diligent of and in each other
Reflective of a world that snows and blizzards
Aware of the audience - the stars - that cry with glee in every climactic scene
We rise
For the sake of simply touching them
Every heart that means to listen
To such precious overtones
The subtle and soft notes below and above the melody
That make magic real,
And the darkest souls hopeful

I love to just watch you smile,
To take in every glimmering feeling
As they pass like seasons from dawn to sunset
Our feelings change
Our tunes build upon the ever growing masterpiece
That is our very existence,
Our union and our uprising of all that is life
I love to trace the silhouette of your grace,
To paint sounds and syllables where your eyes will accept them
To embrace you with an assuring memory to hold forever

We need not worry,
For the melody of this beautiful life has long waited
For the sustaining and blooming accompaniment
That we master, savor, and make better

My friend, my life,
From dawn to dusk,
And every trying night
These overtones will resonate our legacy for all time
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Tacito Avatar
March 28, 2016 at 10:48 AM
What could I say that others here haven't already? Astounding emotion. Resounding ending.
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March 28, 2016 at 9:53 PM
Your words mean a lot! Thanks so much for reading this one. You are one of the poets who inspired me to write it, so thanks for being you. (: ~Laura
Hicks Avatar
March 24, 2016 at 12:00 AM
Extraordinary! It's strange to say, since I already love your poetry so much, but I can see you getting better, Laura! You pull me in right away, and I feel privileged to take part in these sentimental feelings with you. Even in the way you started this fine poem left no room for me to turn away. Allow me to add to this favorites.
Breidenthal Avatar
March 24, 2016 at 8:16 PM
Nonono, YOU'RE extraordinary. :) You among many other poets/poetesses on this site have inspired this poem outah me. So thank you, Timothy, with all of my heart! To have it in your favorites is an honor!! Thank you for noticing the autumnal metaphor!! I have cherished your feedback and your poetry so so sooo much. Please keep being you! <3 ~Laura
Hicks Avatar
March 24, 2016 at 12:08 AM
I find it amazing at how I never find myself scratching my head at the metaphors you use (and you use a lot of them!). They're different, unique ... and yet they are so easy to connect with, and paints a picture in my head that's always reflective.
Hicks Avatar
March 24, 2016 at 12:05 AM
So many poignant expressions to savor. Like the "Rainfall of lights that permeate through eyes swirling lightening warmth into my own" << very celestial and intimate. I also liked your perception of autumn ... "their distant autumnal attentions" ... an original metaphor that made me think of people staring at dead things (the leaves) while you two were off enjoying the playful spring petals.
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March 23, 2016 at 8:48 PM
Hi Laura, Wow, that's so beautifully descriptive--a richly complex ode to a relationship. It has a I look forward to reading more of your work--and I see there is plenty. Cheers, Brian
Breidenthal Avatar
March 23, 2016 at 8:53 PM
Aw, thanks Brian! I look forward to exploring more of yours as well. (: ~Laura
Bordner Avatar
March 23, 2016 at 7:30 PM
This poem just glimmers with warm affection and is glittering with two hearts knowing destin perfection...love becomes a legacy when it creates a path for others to believe in Laura. "I just love to watch you smile, to take in every glimmering feeling..." this poem is a special confession that inspires me deeply Poetess...J.A.B.
Breidenthal Avatar
March 23, 2016 at 8:01 PM
To inspire an amazing person, an incredible poet like you is worth everything to me, Justin. "I love to trace the silhouette of your grace, To paint sounds and syllables where your eyes will accept them" Those lines there were written with you and your poetry in mind, directly to you. You inspire me always. <3 ~Laura
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March 23, 2016 at 3:35 PM
You made this feel real, I am swept along by your rhythm and intention.
Breidenthal Avatar
March 23, 2016 at 4:11 PM
The feelings are real Richard. I am immensely grateful for every soul I come across. Thank you for reading this one. I really felt compelled to write it. ~Laura
Sathasivam Avatar
March 23, 2016 at 3:30 AM
Excellent. Well penned. Enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing it.
Breidenthal Avatar
March 23, 2016 at 8:20 AM
It's a pleasure to share my heart with you, Ravi. Thanks for taking the time to read!~Laura
Mark Avatar
March 23, 2016 at 1:47 AM
superb metaphore drenched write , that absolutely immerses and drownds the reader in your world, ...not many have this gift , .... you do
Breidenthal Avatar
March 23, 2016 at 8:21 AM
You're so awesome. I love your distinctive poetry. Your feedback and your support mean a lot to me! <3~Laura
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