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The more mature ladies sit aside Engrossed in conversing Contented in perusing dance Some their feet rehearsing Such a seat up high with a view Alone upon the hill Longing once again to dance And tap out those fancy rills In a plain Calico day dress, A coat once rich now worn Dreaming of spring, as peach dress swings A spring day newly born Different shades of springs clear blue sky White apple blossom gown Spring green decorations line hall Peach blossom dress the crown Off in the distance, the sound of the train The whistle announces It has stopped here in this young town From train master bounces There's a package over his shoulder Sealed in a fancy bag He mounts his horse that is waiting Behind he did not lag The lady that sits high on hill In a gazebo hoping Unaware that riders from town Approach as she's coping He tells her of observations Of her strong courage In the bag he brought a gown One that matched her virtue The belle of the cotillon ball Dressed in emeral green A velvet dress made just for her One fit for a great queen Inspired by Isaiah Zerbst's Contest: Ballroom Delights From the painting by: Victor Gabriel Gilbert Written: Over several days in November 2014

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 12/26/2014 9:37:00 PM
SARA, A beautiful and wonderful Ballroom Delight. Congrats on your win :) Always & Forever ~LINDA~
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Date: 12/16/2014 8:56:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Sara! So many wonderful descriptive words that present so much imagery! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 12/16/2014 3:12:00 PM
As Joseph said, this is almost Cinderella like. A beautiful story Sara. Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 12/16/2014 2:23:00 PM
congratulations Sara on another fine win ,much enjoyed
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Date: 12/16/2014 1:13:00 PM
Falling back to congratulate you Sara,no doubt you did a wonderful Job here and thank goodness for this rewarding victory...huggs
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Date: 12/16/2014 12:11:00 PM
such wonderful imagery - many congrats on your win:-) Hugs jan xx
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Date: 11/27/2014 11:36:00 AM
This my friend is indeed a superb write. Very deep in its internal meanings or should I say --"eternal meanings"? Tis truly a masterpiece in writing on the subject matter. A wonderfully super 7 and fav'ing it to read and study later. I see some parts in it that I lack in my poetry. Always attempting to learn and poetry has never been mastered by anybody IMHO. Not even the greats, the legendary poets.
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Date: 11/22/2014 12:32:00 PM
Enjoyed reading this Sara, best wishes in the contest..'
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Date: 11/21/2014 4:41:00 PM
Hello Sara...I love the Cinderella touch you gave to this story...Very nicely penned...Thanks for stopping by...hugs
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Date: 11/21/2014 12:47:00 PM
A masterpiece Sara,wishing luck in the contest...huggs
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Date: 11/19/2014 1:59:00 PM
- Yes, dreaming of beautiful spring .... with peach dress so nice ..... I want to dance :)) - Beautiful poem, dear Sara! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 11/18/2014 6:41:00 PM
You make me anxious for spring again.
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Date: 11/18/2014 10:40:00 AM
Nice reflective write with rich imagery Sara!
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Date: 11/18/2014 10:28:00 AM
first sentence in the second stanza -- hight?? The last stanza was awesome -- I could actually smell apples and peaches . . . spring in the air or at least in our dreams!!
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Date: 11/18/2014 10:09:00 AM
such vivid imagery of a dance that makes me want to sway, sara.. hope all's better with your loved one's eye surgery.. huggs
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Date: 11/18/2014 10:02:00 AM
A coat once rich now worn...interesting to read?Ragards. - Safa
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