Outside Looking In

The more mature ladies sit aside
Engrossed in conversing
Contented in perusing dance
Some their feet rehearsing

Such a seat up high with a view
Alone upon the hill
Longing once again to dance
And tap out those fancy rills

In a plain Calico day dress,
A coat once rich now worn
Dreaming of spring, as peach dress swings
A spring day newly born

Different shades of springs clear blue sky
White apple blossom gown
Spring green decorations line hall
Peach blossom dress the crown

Off in the distance, the sound of the train
The whistle announces
It has stopped here in this young town
From train master bounces

There's a package over his shoulder
Sealed in a fancy bag
He mounts his horse that is waiting
Behind he did not lag

The lady that sits high on hill
In a gazebo hoping
Unaware that riders from town 
Approach as she's coping

He tells her of observations
Of her strong courage
In the bag he brought a gown
One that matched her virtue

The belle of the cotillon ball
Dressed in emeral green
A velvet dress made just for her
One fit for a great queen

Inspired by
Isaiah Zerbst's 
Contest: Ballroom Delights
From the painting by: Victor Gabriel Gilbert
Written: Over several days in November 2014
  

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 12/26/2014 9:37:00 PM
SARA, A beautiful and wonderful Ballroom Delight. Congrats on your win :) Always & Forever ~LINDA~
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Date: 12/16/2014 8:56:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Sara! So many wonderful descriptive words that present so much imagery! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 12/16/2014 3:12:00 PM
As Joseph said, this is almost Cinderella like. A beautiful story Sara. Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 12/16/2014 2:23:00 PM
congratulations Sara on another fine win ,much enjoyed
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Date: 12/16/2014 1:13:00 PM
Falling back to congratulate you Sara,no doubt you did a wonderful Job here and thank goodness for this rewarding victory...huggs
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Date: 12/16/2014 12:11:00 PM
such wonderful imagery - many congrats on your win:-) Hugs jan xx
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Date: 11/27/2014 11:36:00 AM
This my friend is indeed a superb write. Very deep in its internal meanings or should I say --"eternal meanings"? Tis truly a masterpiece in writing on the subject matter. A wonderfully super 7 and fav'ing it to read and study later. I see some parts in it that I lack in my poetry. Always attempting to learn and poetry has never been mastered by anybody IMHO. Not even the greats, the legendary poets.
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Date: 11/22/2014 12:32:00 PM
Enjoyed reading this Sara, best wishes in the contest..'
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Date: 11/21/2014 4:41:00 PM
Hello Sara...I love the Cinderella touch you gave to this story...Very nicely penned...Thanks for stopping by...hugs
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Date: 11/21/2014 12:47:00 PM
A masterpiece Sara,wishing luck in the contest...huggs
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Date: 11/19/2014 1:59:00 PM
- Yes, dreaming of beautiful spring .... with peach dress so nice ..... I want to dance :)) - Beautiful poem, dear Sara! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 11/18/2014 6:41:00 PM
You make me anxious for spring again.
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Date: 11/18/2014 10:40:00 AM
Nice reflective write with rich imagery Sara!
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Date: 11/18/2014 10:28:00 AM
first sentence in the second stanza -- hight?? The last stanza was awesome -- I could actually smell apples and peaches . . . spring in the air or at least in our dreams!!
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Date: 11/18/2014 10:09:00 AM
such vivid imagery of a dance that makes me want to sway, sara.. hope all's better with your loved one's eye surgery.. huggs
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Date: 11/18/2014 10:02:00 AM
A coat once rich now worn...interesting to read?Ragards. - Safa
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