Out of Water

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For Out Of Water Poetry Contest

Written 2/15/2015

I am a parched and thirsty land
                                My soil is cracked, dry and lifeless
                                My fields are fallow and wanting
                                My farmers agonize and pray for rain

                                I am the bread basket for many souls
                                Yet years of drought are exacting their toll
                                My crops are failing, my wells are running dry
                                Without water, my land's lifeblood

                                I will become a wasteland and die 
                                I am a parched and thirsty land
                                I, the great Golden State, am out of water
                                I am California.







Written on 2/15/2015

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Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 9/1/2015 1:56:00 AM

Wonderful write and a superb win! Big congrats Laura!

Laura Leiser
Date: 9/1/2015 11:26:00 AM

Thank you, Dr. Upma :)

Sandra Haight

Date: 4/4/2015 4:16:00 PM

Laura, stopping back to congratulate your on your nice win! Hugs, Sandra

Laura Leiser
Date: 4/12/2015 5:33:00 PM

A late reply from me, but thank you, Sandra :)

Sheri Fresonke Harper

Date: 4/4/2015 3:12:00 PM

Good statement for poor California, you placed well. Thanks for entering this very popular contest, we had very many wonderful contributions. Read more at: http://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/out_of_water_bataan_641273 Read more at: http://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/out_of_water_642576

Laura Leiser
Date: 4/12/2015 5:34:00 PM

Thanks, Sheri. I appreciate your comments :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/16/2015 9:42:00 AM

we are not getting much rain OR snow. What might our future hold????

Sandra Haight

Date: 2/16/2015 9:38:00 AM

Laura, yours is an amazing poem for this theme! You really imaged how devastating being out of water is where you are through this personification of your State. So sad... Best wishes for the contest. Hugs, Sandra

Laura Leiser
Date: 2/16/2015 10:09:00 AM

Thank you, Sandra, for your comments. I wanted this poem to have gravity so the message could come across. I'm glad it did, since it really is a problem here.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/15/2015 7:01:00 PM

wow, Laura. I hope it does not reach this condition completely all too soon, but I know it truly is getting there. maybe Utah will be the same with this marvlous warm winter we are having and little snow. This is one of the very best i have seen for this particular contest.Way to do the theme amazingly well.

Laura Leiser
Date: 2/15/2015 9:08:00 PM

Thank you, Andrea. I wanted to do the poem in a different perspective, and I thought this approach would be the most powerful to get my point across. Hope Utah is getting enough rain.

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 2/15/2015 6:27:00 PM

A powerful write Laura, and the personification adds to the feelings of sorrow...I didn't realize the severity of California's drought. Thanks for bringing awareness to the problem...hugs, Rhonda

Laura Leiser
Date: 2/15/2015 9:06:00 PM

Thank you, Rhonda, for your kind comments. I do pray we get rain soon. It has been unseasonably hot as well this year.