Our Silver Years

Our Silver Years When, we two embrace our silver years, Silver skies of autumn arrive mystifying form. The forests’ green has a silvery hue. Silence overshadows chirping birds and croaking frogs. Even the roosters snuggle in oversleeping. The dogs are romping; cats find warmth. Children and grandchildren have gone their way, When, we two embrace our silver years. Written October 27, 2014 Revised November 8, 2014 Written for Poetry Soup Member Contest: 8 Lines 7 Words Enjambment - Poetry Contest Sponsor Rick Parise

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Rick Parise

Date: 11/10/2014 8:34:00 AM

A Beautiful picture you have painted. Great imagery!!!!Congrats to YOU!!!Sweet memories and vivid reflection.

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen
Date: 11/10/2014 3:20:00 PM

Thank you very much, Rick, for taking the time to read and leave such a lovely comment...and for the placement. Big Smiles, Dane Ann

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 11/3/2014 5:46:00 PM

OOPS! I forgot to make the first and the last lines the same.

Rick Parise

Date: 11/2/2014 12:04:00 PM

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Russell Sivey

Date: 10/27/2014 11:33:00 PM

You have written an awesome poem here Dane Ann! Just a friendly note there is an error however within your write... The fifth line has 8 words instead of seven. Try saying, "And baby goats huddle in the hay" instead. That works with seven words! I hope you don't mind me correcting you, I just want you to do well in the contest! I really enjoyed reading this wonderful piece here this evening! great Work!!

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen
Date: 10/28/2014 6:07:00 PM

It's funny, I had originally written it with 7 words... then, I went back and added a word...yikes. Thanks for second catching my miscount. That's what I get for trying to write with children playing all around.