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Our Moment

Visions of a sweet champagne colored moonlight shines upon broken promises A soulful presence echoes in the back corners of my mind Left to wonder if expectations influenced my reality Remembering how you held me like a conversation igniting magic from your touch Infusing its uncontrollable spell into the moment And unlike my reality..... that's all it was... just a moment in time One soon to be discarded like wisps of smoke excited to leave your thoughts Our moment too soon passed

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Pace Ink-U-Script

Date: 10/30/2019 12:14:00 PM

I absolutely love how you captured the moment of you two from beginning to end.

Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/2/2019 11:34:00 AM

Why thank you so much G! It's nothing compared to your work!;) hugs B

Joseph May

Date: 9/10/2019 2:18:00 PM

Sweet visions of romance gone up in smoke...Well written Brenda....

Brenda Chiri
Date: 9/10/2019 9:44:00 PM

Thank you so much Joseph!;)

Lyric Man

Date: 9/9/2019 8:41:00 PM

So many can relate to this full bodied, melancholy work.. and yet, it feels beautifully unique. This poem likewise will be lost in the abundance of a thousand more to follow and I’m sure many of them will be glorious. But for now, let me hold time.. to treasure these words for just.. one more enraptured moment! Pure joy lovely girl!

Brenda Chiri
Date: 9/9/2019 8:51:00 PM

Ah your words sounded better then mine! Thank you so much!;)

Sandra Adams

Date: 9/9/2019 7:32:00 PM

wow this one is poignant yet equally beautiful Brenda, glad i found it tonight! :) hugs

Brenda Chiri
Date: 9/9/2019 8:31:00 PM

Lol thank you Sandy for the great comment and the showing me the mistake!;) you are too kind!;)

Vijay Pandit

Date: 9/9/2019 2:50:00 PM

This is really really good ..excellent poetry Brenda.

Brenda Chiri
Date: 9/9/2019 2:53:00 PM

Thank you so much Vijay coming from you that's s huge compliment;)

Chris Green

Date: 9/9/2019 2:08:00 PM

This was beautifully sad Brenda. Your poetry is absolutely amazing. Each day it gets better and better. Now I wish I could write like you.

Brenda Chiri
Date: 9/9/2019 2:21:00 PM

Hahaha! Right chris your poetry is amazing! I only wish I could ride to your level and write sweet words like you do!;) thank you!;)

John Fleming

Date: 9/9/2019 2:03:00 PM

Gosh! Sultry stuff poetess...plenty of beautifully crafted lines with a lavishly enriched and sensuously flavored taste throughout. Love it! With much fondness. :) john

Brenda Chiri
Date: 9/9/2019 2:20:00 PM

Lol thank you so much John! You really are too kind to me!;) all my affection!()