Maria Fernandez-Garcia Poet Free verse

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Our lost kingdom

Right day we've met
struggling for love,
right feelings 
to be encountered 
for two broken hearts.
We built our empire
of emotions and love,
our golden shell 
to be covered by,
our castle to live in.

We've been 
protected for years, 
but the walls 
weren't strong enough.
No intruders destroyed 
our big stone building,
the war was inside,
sharp arrows from old years,
wounds that never healed.

We both lost the battle 
when our thoughts stagnated,  
instead of moving forward.
We both got lost 
in our own past, 
instead of strengthening 
our present,
what we had together;
our castle to take care of, 
our shared crown to protect,
our kingdom to fight for.

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Christina Bowring July 5, 2024 at 11:25 PM Dear Maria, I loved reading this poignant poem. Your use of metaphors are wonderful and conjures up so much imagery. ‘ The war was inside, sharp arrows from old years, wounds that never healed’ really stood out for me. The last stanza is powerful and profound- it’s not always easy letting go of the past but sometimes if you don’t, it acts as a shackle and traps you so you cannot move forward as so wonderfully and sadly illustrated in you poem. A great, emotive write from you my lovely, Maria Fernandez-Garcia July 6, 2024 at 3:08 AM My dear Christina, thank you so much for your kind and lovely message. I'm very glad you liked it. I want to wish you a wonderful weekend my dear! Christina Bowring July 5, 2024 at 11:25 PM sweet friend. Have a lovely weekend. Luv and hugs to you xx

Victor Buhagiar June 28, 2024 at 1:48 AM A great metaphorical poem, my friend. It describes the emotions of parting love perfectly. A fine poem indeed. Maria Fernandez-Garcia June 28, 2024 at 4:42 AM Thank you very much, Victor. I hope you have a great Friday!.

Daniel Henry Rodgers June 27, 2024 at 4:33 AM Dear Maria, I could feel the heartbreak in your words. My first love, whom I thought I would one day marry, crumbled to the ground like the arrows in your poem. But my soul mate came into my life shortly after, and now we have been married for 42 years. Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel Maria Fernandez-Garcia June 27, 2024 at 5:53 AM Good afternoon, Daniel. Happy to hear that you've been married for 42 years. Well, I suppose the most have a first love to remember. Thank you so much for your lovely comment and your nice love story. Have a bessed day, my friend!

Darlene De Beaulieu June 26, 2024 at 3:22 PM Hello Maria, sometimes the love dies between a couple. i hope that never happens to you. Once a person loses the love there is nothing there, the love died. Hugs my friend. /Darlene/ Darlene De Beaulieu June 27, 2024 at 9:49 AM Hello Maria, Yes right first love is never forgotten. In spirit i am with you having coffee. Like right now i am having coffee with you. We can still talk about our life on email. My fur child is okay. Hugs /Darlene/ Maria Fernandez-Garcia June 26, 2024 at 3:30 PM How right you are. It happened to me once, and he is a friend, but far from me. That was my first love for years. Now, I am married to a nice man, but first love never is forgotten. Thank you my Darlene, I wish we could have a coffee together and talk for long time about our life. I hope your little friend, your child is ok? So you do. Hugs/ María