Our lost kingdom

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Right day we've met struggling for love, right feelings to be encountered for two broken hearts. We built our empire of emotions and love, our golden shell to be covered by, our castle to live in. We've been protected for years, but the walls weren't strong enough. No intruders destroyed our big stone building, the war was inside, sharp arrows from old years, wounds that never healed. We both lost the battle when our thoughts stagnated, instead of moving forward. We both got lost in our own past, instead of strengthening our present, what we had together; our castle to take care of, our shared crown to protect, our kingdom to fight for.

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Christina Bowring

Date: 7/5/2024 11:25:00 PM

Dear Maria, I loved reading this poignant poem. Your use of metaphors are wonderful and conjures up so much imagery. ‘ The war was inside, sharp arrows from old years, wounds that never healed’ really stood out for me. The last stanza is powerful and profound- it’s not always easy letting go of the past but sometimes if you don’t, it acts as a shackle and traps you so you cannot move forward as so wonderfully and sadly illustrated in you poem. A great, emotive write from you my lovely,

Maria Fernandez-Garcia
Date: 7/6/2024 3:08:00 AM

My dear Christina, thank you so much for your kind and lovely message. I'm very glad you liked it. I want to wish you a wonderful weekend my dear!

Christina Bowring
Date: 7/5/2024 11:25:00 PM

sweet friend. Have a lovely weekend. Luv and hugs to you xx

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 6/28/2024 1:48:00 AM

A great metaphorical poem, my friend. It describes the emotions of parting love perfectly. A fine poem indeed.

Maria Fernandez-Garcia
Date: 6/28/2024 4:42:00 AM

Thank you very much, Victor. I hope you have a great Friday!.

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 6/27/2024 4:33:00 AM

Dear Maria, I could feel the heartbreak in your words. My first love, whom I thought I would one day marry, crumbled to the ground like the arrows in your poem. But my soul mate came into my life shortly after, and now we have been married for 42 years. Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel

Maria Fernandez-Garcia
Date: 6/27/2024 5:53:00 AM

Good afternoon, Daniel. Happy to hear that you've been married for 42 years. Well, I suppose the most have a first love to remember. Thank you so much for your lovely comment and your nice love story. Have a bessed day, my friend!

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 6/26/2024 3:22:00 PM

Hello Maria, sometimes the love dies between a couple. i hope that never happens to you. Once a person loses the love there is nothing there, the love died. Hugs my friend. /Darlene/

Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 6/27/2024 9:49:00 AM

Hello Maria, Yes right first love is never forgotten. In spirit i am with you having coffee. Like right now i am having coffee with you. We can still talk about our life on email. My fur child is okay. Hugs /Darlene/

Maria Fernandez-Garcia
Date: 6/26/2024 3:30:00 PM

How right you are. It happened to me once, and he is a friend, but far from me. That was my first love for years. Now, I am married to a nice man, but first love never is forgotten. Thank you my Darlene, I wish we could have a coffee together and talk for long time about our life. I hope your little friend, your child is ok? So you do. Hugs/ María