Michael Jordan Poet Free verse

Our Choice

For the love of man 
That which I see 
So hollow and empty
(Like a casket yet filled)
Yet still, something inside cries
For empty arms have what to hold
At what cost 
Should life be bought
(The price of war)
Over love that’s sought
I shall take my penitence
As well as my leave
For it is our choice
That which we believe


You know my disadvantage is 
having no Poetic knowledge. I
I looked up E.E. Cummings and
read some of his poem's and I
have no idea if this poem will
be acceptable, but hey I tried.

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Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen May 24, 2009 at 4:17 AM Michael, ditto on your last remarks. Your effort paid off. Congratulations on your placement in the tribute to ee cummings contest. sweet a write did you ( thinking for). Keep writing, Lovingly, Dane

Raul Moreno May 22, 2009 at 3:09 PM Michael, congrats on your success in the contest...Raul

Sharon Winter May 22, 2009 at 2:09 PM Yahoo yippeeee congrats Michael an an extremely excellent and well deserved win! Have a beautiful weekend! Love, Shar

Carrie Richards May 22, 2009 at 6:55 AM You did great, michael!! Congratulations on placing in the contest! Hooray for you!! ~ love, Carrie

Brian Strand May 21, 2009 at 11:59 PM Congrats on your success in Michele's contest Michael Rgds Brian

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen April 26, 2009 at 4:25 PM Hi Michael. I'm glad to see you tried...smiling...I tried, too. It was a real stretch for me. I like the message in your poem. It is meaningful in this world of war. God Bless you. Love, Dane

Trudy Diane Rider April 26, 2009 at 11:03 AM I think you have captured EE Cummings very well Michael, your poetry is always awesome in content as well!! Good luck with the contest! luv ~Trudy~

Charmaine Chircop April 24, 2009 at 10:48 PM this is wonderful,your knowledge is in your heart and soul,it reflects wonderfully in your writes-cheers------charma

L'Nass Shango April 24, 2009 at 8:15 AM A very refreshing perspective, I particularly enjoyed the close.

Brian Strand April 24, 2009 at 12:06 AM Best wishes with this one Michael.Rgds Brian

Carolyn Devonshire April 23, 2009 at 8:01 PM I think you've captured cumming's spirit, Michael. Some folks concentrate on his lack of punctuation, but you dug deeper into his intent. Good work!

C. E. Mcmullin April 23, 2009 at 6:15 PM If it be acceptable to thee, who else doth thou need to be pleased! C.E. McMullin's rule! Live-learn-love A favorite for the file- poet butterfly

Tyesha Ehigiator April 23, 2009 at 5:35 PM This is a fantastic poem, Powerful lines through and through...Each time I read a poem of yours in any form, I am amazed..I don't know anything about e.e. cummings, never heard of him and so I don't know what his work is like, but I know your work and it is superb, all you have to do is write from what is within your heart. I agree with Sharon, you can do any form and do it so well...Best Wishes! YF4L, Tyesha

Sharon Winter April 23, 2009 at 4:16 PM Well I do not believe you need any more poetic knowledge when it is an inherent trait within you to begin with. This is an absolutely excellent poem in the style of cummings. In fact I read it three times and I am going to read it again. You do realize you can do any form, and do it well don't you? Awesome work Michael. Good luck! YF4L Love, Shar

Carrie Richards April 23, 2009 at 4:08 PM This poem stands on it's own....beautiful...with, or without the influence of e.e.cummings. Wonderful writing, Michael! ~ Good luck!! ~ love, Carrie