Origami Tempest

Iridescent sprinklers 
hiss to life;
a flock of birds erupts 
in origami tempest.
Serrulated wings shimmer,
rising from the grass
in tawny ribbons
of serpentine rippling.
A gust of smoke,
they waft in liberation 
of fickle breezes
as a school of fish
in saffron-draped ocean
undulates
with fickle currents,
then disappear an illusion
into cyan sky.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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Dietrich Avatar
May 20, 2018 at 5:27 PM
utterly fantastic writing. You are so talented, Dale. I do not know which contest this won in, but you surely deserved your podium finish. Congrats.
Cozart Avatar
May 20, 2018 at 5:43 PM
Thanks so much, Andrea, I really appreciate it.
Marc Avatar
May 20, 2018 at 10:22 AM
Congratulations on your podium finish. I love watching an early morning sprinkler “hiss to life”. Well done Dale! Great imagery.
Cozart Avatar
May 20, 2018 at 10:55 AM
Thanks, PM!
Gentry Avatar
May 20, 2018 at 8:50 AM
Congratulations on your win. Beautiful imagery.
Cozart Avatar
May 20, 2018 at 9:02 AM
Thanks, Susan.
Gauthier Avatar
May 20, 2018 at 6:18 AM
Beautiful imagery. Congrats on your well deserved podium finish, Dale.
Cozart Avatar
May 20, 2018 at 7:41 AM
Thanks so much, Line.
Sinha-Roy Avatar
May 20, 2018 at 4:39 AM
Congratulations, dale on your wonderful win. the last two lines are great.
Cozart Avatar
May 20, 2018 at 7:41 AM
Thank you, Subimal.
Devonshire Avatar
May 19, 2018 at 6:32 PM
Amazing imagery, Dale. Your "tempest" springs to life with action! Enjoyed, Carolyn
Cozart Avatar
May 19, 2018 at 6:34 PM
Thank you, Carolyn.
Inman Avatar
May 18, 2018 at 9:50 PM
Enjoyed your write Dale, very imaginative. It leaves me wondering what it is. I picture it as birds or butterflies or even locust.
Cozart Avatar
May 19, 2018 at 7:49 AM
Thanks, James. I added 'of birds' for clarification.
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