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Origami Tempest

Iridescent sprinklers hiss to life; a flock of birds erupts in origami tempest. Serrulated wings shimmer, rising from the grass in tawny ribbons of serpentine rippling. A gust of smoke, they waft in liberation of fickle breezes as a school of fish in saffron-draped ocean undulates with fickle currents, then disappear an illusion into cyan sky.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018




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Date: 5/20/2018 5:27:00 PM
utterly fantastic writing. You are so talented, Dale. I do not know which contest this won in, but you surely deserved your podium finish. Congrats.
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Dale Gregory Cozart
Date: 5/20/2018 5:43:00 PM
Thanks so much, Andrea, I really appreciate it.
Date: 5/20/2018 10:22:00 AM
Congratulations on your podium finish. I love watching an early morning sprinkler “hiss to life”. Well done Dale! Great imagery.
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Dale Gregory Cozart
Date: 5/20/2018 10:55:00 AM
Thanks, PM!
Date: 5/20/2018 8:50:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. Beautiful imagery.
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Dale Gregory Cozart
Date: 5/20/2018 9:02:00 AM
Thanks, Susan.
Date: 5/20/2018 6:18:00 AM
Beautiful imagery. Congrats on your well deserved podium finish, Dale.
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Dale Gregory Cozart
Date: 5/20/2018 7:41:00 AM
Thanks so much, Line.
Date: 5/20/2018 4:39:00 AM
Congratulations, dale on your wonderful win. the last two lines are great.
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Dale Gregory Cozart
Date: 5/20/2018 7:41:00 AM
Thank you, Subimal.
Date: 5/19/2018 6:32:00 PM
Amazing imagery, Dale. Your "tempest" springs to life with action! Enjoyed, Carolyn
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Dale Gregory Cozart
Date: 5/19/2018 6:34:00 PM
Thank you, Carolyn.
Date: 5/18/2018 9:50:00 PM
Enjoyed your write Dale, very imaginative. It leaves me wondering what it is. I picture it as birds or butterflies or even locust.
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Dale Gregory Cozart
Date: 5/19/2018 7:49:00 AM
Thanks, James. I added 'of birds' for clarification.

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