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Poetic Form: Senryu
Inspired: 2024 March 04
Image: N/A

or no laughing matter: senryu's

a hill stream flowing a bottom lake fulfilling a near sea rising a hill stream in want a bottom lake where they flaunt the sea that boys taunt a boy wades in stream kids by a lake play tag team the sea is a dream
a stream in a rush a lake dangerously rises rough seas off the shore a stream rips its banks a bottom lake overflows a nearby sea floods trees fall in the stream lake closed signs flap everywhere angry storm moves in
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Empress Avatar
April 14, 2024 at 3:39 AM
This is inspiring dear hilo, will be a good prompt to do for brain exercise, im planning on trying, and i love this example the most from all yours, the way it flows and how youve painted imagery too is so very creative! I especially love the opening senryu! So clever! Sea is a dream for islanders like us, it is my place to go when i want to dream away too. I absolutely loved this! Pleasure reading this
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
April 14, 2024 at 8:44 AM
A blessed commentary on this Sunday dawning that's yet to be as a pre-dawn dark holds onto dear life--ours, oh well, patience is a virtue--named pre-dawn, Aloha, William
De Beaulieu Avatar
March 4, 2024 at 12:08 PM
Hello Hilo Poet, I like the like the last line when the falls into the stream , the lake is closed and the angry wind moves on. My friend. Enjoy your day. /Darlene/
De Beaulieu Avatar
March 5, 2024 at 10:38 AM
Hello Hilo Poet, your welcome Hilo Poet. I am glad yuou are enjoying your day my friend. Aloha! /Darlene/
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
March 4, 2024 at 1:36 PM
I am so very glad, Darlene, that my day is being enjoyed because of comments like yours today, and for that, I am truly grateful, my friend. Aloha, William
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