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For Dilly Dally's I May Or May Not Be Opposed Poetry Contest

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First six lines of my triolet entitled “Wrapped in White” followed by my contrasting six lines which I’ll entitle “Crestfallen in Snow” I long to tread upon the snow in hush of winter, wrapped in white; in feathered mounds serenely go. I long to tread upon the snow. The boughs hang low; no wind doth blow. My love, come see the wondrous sight! Who wants to trudge in knee-high snow especially in cold of night when wind chill factor’s ten below? Cars slide off roads and fierce winds blow. Boughs break and icicles hang low. Stay, Dear, instead, by our firelight!

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Date: 1/16/2024 7:37:00 PM
Funny, I didn't see a lot of comments on this snow job. It's very good. The contrast makes me chuckle. So, I ask myself do I like #1 or #2? I vote #2. It's so much more interesting to portray that aspect of snow. It's a contrast to the usual mush so often seen.
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Date: 12/26/2023 3:50:00 AM
This is beautiful.... ! You have made a clever opposition. Stark contrast. All the Best.....
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Date: 12/26/2023 3:48:00 AM
Wow, dear Andrea, this is such a beautiful take for the contest.. I love how you've shown the contrast where one wishes to embrace the snowy views and on the other hand, feel the warmth of firelight instead of the winter's cold.. Quite a creative and artistic write, with impeccable rhymes.. Both of your poems flow so well! Wishing you the best for this contest, sending light :)
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Date: 12/25/2023 3:28:00 AM
Nice choice to oppose, which you have done so well Andrea... snow is beautiful until people start walking all over it... we have no snow here, its quite warm today for this time of year... have a nice day Andrea.. Best wishes to you and your family.
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