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Opposing Tremelo Torrents

I May or May Not Be Opposed 1-3-24 Original Poem Tremolo Torrents I could not get the bold function to work so I put the original lines in parenthesis. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Opposing Tremolo Torrents “Thundering fat raindrops fall Driven deluge in wild squalls As torrents pelt the thirsty ground Sheer rain staccatos resound Tempests fury rides the storm Wind-swept raindrops leap free form.” Whispering mists kiss the air Float on sheer quiet prayers Murmurs of a zephyr’s sigh Tiptoe through a misty sky In rhythms of hazy veils Gentle brumes rest on cattails.

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David Kavanagh

Date: 1/8/2024 2:11:00 PM

What an excellent contrasting poem Sam, reminds me of the weather in Ireland, changing from downpours to mists almost on a whim, wonderful choice of language too, congratulations! cheers David

Di11y Da11y

Date: 1/8/2024 11:52:00 AM

I loved the contrasts and how beautiful heavy rain transformed to mist was - seeing them both together was breath taking. Congratulations on your well deserved placement.

Paige Hind

Date: 1/6/2024 10:11:00 PM

Love the "raindrops leaping free-form" I feel like I am walking out in the rain. Beautiful work, Sam!

Ink Empress

Date: 1/5/2024 1:33:00 AM

So beautiful how you’ve written an opposite poem for your original version. And your wordplay, is just beyond impeccable. I love the rhymes too. Especially love the lines “ Whispering mists kiss the air“ ah how gorgeous! So creative and picturesque how you’ve personified nature. “ Murmurs of a zephyr’s sigh“ i always love the word zephyr in a poem adds beauty so eloquently. “ Tiptoe through a misty sky“ deeply moving! I love that! So very well crafted for the prompt. Im sure will score high. BOL

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 1/4/2024 4:41:00 PM

The storm comes vividly to life, through your beautiful images, Sam. This poem was a joy to read. Blessings

Joseph May

Date: 1/4/2024 12:24:00 PM

Nice depiction of the sounds of the storm, and the "misty rhythms" that follow, All the best for 2024

Silent One

Date: 1/4/2024 11:36:00 AM

You opposed it very well.. will be interesting to see the results of this contest and how the judge reads and interprets them.. such is the abstract beauty of poetry my friend... best of luck.