Sam Kauffman Poet Couplet

Opposing Tremelo Torrents

I May or May Not Be Opposed 1-3-24  Original Poem Tremolo Torrents
I could not get the bold function to work so I put the original lines in parenthesis.
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Opposing Tremolo Torrents

“Thundering fat raindrops fall
Driven deluge in wild squalls
As torrents pelt the thirsty ground
Sheer rain staccatos resound
Tempests fury rides the storm
Wind-swept raindrops leap free form.”

Whispering mists kiss the air
Float on sheer quiet prayers
Murmurs of a zephyr’s sigh
Tiptoe through a misty sky
In rhythms of hazy veils
Gentle brumes rest on cattails.

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David Kavanagh January 8, 2024 at 2:11 PM What an excellent contrasting poem Sam, reminds me of the weather in Ireland, changing from downpours to mists almost on a whim, wonderful choice of language too, congratulations! cheers David

Paige Hind January 6, 2024 at 10:11 PM Love the "raindrops leaping free-form" I feel like I am walking out in the rain. Beautiful work, Sam!

Ink Empress January 5, 2024 at 1:33 AM So beautiful how you’ve written an opposite poem for your original version. And your wordplay, is just beyond impeccable. I love the rhymes too. Especially love the lines “ Whispering mists kiss the air“ ah how gorgeous! So creative and picturesque how you’ve personified nature. “ Murmurs of a zephyr’s sigh“ i always love the word zephyr in a poem adds beauty so eloquently. “ Tiptoe through a misty sky“ deeply moving! I love that! So very well crafted for the prompt. Im sure will score high. BOL

Evelyn Judy Buehler January 4, 2024 at 4:41 PM The storm comes vividly to life, through your beautiful images, Sam. This poem was a joy to read. Blessings

Joseph May January 4, 2024 at 12:24 PM Nice depiction of the sounds of the storm, and the "misty rhythms" that follow, All the best for 2024

Silent One January 4, 2024 at 11:36 AM You opposed it very well.. will be interesting to see the results of this contest and how the judge reads and interprets them.. such is the abstract beauty of poetry my friend... best of luck.