Sotto Poet Poet Rhyme

Oozing Words TSF

Written: August 21, 2025, for contest by Charles Messina

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Drum beat
soft rays
moon slip
words ooze
eyes shut
winds rose
night sweet

Dark thread
tears swell
hands shake
dreams lull
skies fall
birds cry
heart treat

Stone mute
veins bloom
grief hums
hope falls
time bends
light goals
dust rush

Mind stays
truth leans
steps slow
thoughts brew
stars gleam
fears shaft
voice hush

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Krishnanand Guptar September 14, 2025 at 7:29 AM Congratulations poet friend on your win in this contest with a lovely poem with deep diverse layers of metaphors with profound thoughts.

Charles Messina September 14, 2025 at 3:34 AM Wonderfully done, Lasaad. Like Valsa said- "Top notch" Congratulations on your placement and thank you for entering my contest!

Valsa George August 28, 2025 at 10:03 AM This is a great entry for the contest, dear friend. You are indeed top notch. All the best.

Victor Buhagiar August 27, 2025 at 2:01 AM What can I say about your poem. You are indeed top class. I'm sure you will rate high.

Joe Maverick August 24, 2025 at 2:00 AM Lots of volume, despite the quiet, enjoyed The thought are running riot.'

Duke Beaufort August 23, 2025 at 11:55 AM SP, this poem has an interesting flow and I suppose there's a combination of good and bad things happening all at once. We try to make whatever happens into something wonderful. Take care, and SMILES!!

Paige Hind August 22, 2025 at 6:09 PM This is really different and beautiful.

Yann Rolland August 22, 2025 at 5:22 PM talented and musical, read it twice thanks poet

Paula Goldsmith August 22, 2025 at 9:55 AM Your "Oozing Words TSF" is a creative write. I enjoyed reading. "Good Luck" Have a lovely day writing away..........

Valsa George August 22, 2025 at 6:28 AM Never knew you can be so succinct. Beautifully creative. All the best dear Lazaad. I have a very important family function on Sunday. So, too busy to make a detailed comment. For two, three days, taking a short break.

sara Etgen-Baker August 21, 2025 at 4:45 PM Excellent creation for this contest. Although succinct, I found your poem engaging and was left with a slight sense of emptiness....just me, though. Hugs from Texas, Sara

John Fleming August 21, 2025 at 1:57 PM Should do very well, S.P. :) john

Hilda Greenhough August 21, 2025 at 9:29 AM Good luck with the contest. A dark threat permeates your poem. Without giving the cause of upcoming events, your words draw me in.