Onyx Dream

I dreamed a black; an onyx lake
before the sun’s first dawning rays
its surface marble smooth and makes
no sound without the warmth of day

I saw myself; a ghost it seemed
stripped naked on the grassy floor
beneath the waning moon’s cold beams
just staring at the other shore

From far away a whip-poor-will
called lonely, just a sleepy song
it tickled in the morning chill
and broke the water’s pull – so strong

to slip into that silent space
where never lived a false love’s face
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013


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Date: 10/6/2013 9:51:00 AM
Carolina, stopping by this one again... Congratulations on having your poem Featured on the soup's home page. Always & Forever *LINDA*
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Date: 9/12/2013 2:33:00 PM
Very nice writing. You are gifted Dear Poet. Take Care, Cindy
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Date: 9/10/2013 8:04:00 PM
Hi Carolina, thanks for the sweet comment... :-) Hopefully you'll stop by again soon. I to am looking forward in reading your poetry... xox...Linda
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Date: 4/21/2013 8:00:00 PM
Carolina, Congratulations with your Featured Poem of the week :-) it has been an honor spotting your poem on the soups home page. Take care, and have yourself a lovely- GOODNIGHT **LINDA**
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Date: 4/16/2013 8:20:00 AM
Congrats on having your poem being featured on the Poetrysoup homepage this week. keep on blowing our mind with your pen and passion. Wishing you many more features. love and hugs, Adeleke
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Date: 2/8/2013 6:09:00 PM
this is REALLY good
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Date: 2/8/2013 6:28:00 AM
Perfect meter and good rhyme for this form. I loved the word choices and imagery and what a turn in the final couplet! Cheers, Roy
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Date: 2/7/2013 2:53:00 PM
Your first group is devastating, a very fine description of lost love - like being dead. I doubt the whip-poor-will could melt the freeze. Anywho. I love your poem. Congrats on the selection. daver
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Date: 2/5/2013 11:07:00 AM
Love it
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Date: 4/16/2013 4:04:00 AM
I loved this poem when I read it the first time and love it even more now. This is excellent work in my humble view. Very tasty. One of my favorites. Thanks for sharing. Doug
Date: 2/4/2013 10:56:00 PM
Carolina, :-) Congratulations with your creative top featured poem of the week. Take care and have yourself an excellent time here on the soup... I know I sure am. * or should I say I will at least try. Always~ & ~ Forever*LINDA"
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Date: 2/3/2013 10:31:00 AM
Welcome to the soup !! I've read this in WTT and have enjoyed reading it again. Hope you enjoy your time on the soup as well as WTT.
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Date: 2/2/2013 6:14:00 AM
welcome to the soup hope you enjoy it here
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Date: 2/1/2013 10:00:00 AM
This is one of the best sonnets I've read. It was a pleasure to read your work this afternoon! Welcome to PS :)
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Date: 2/1/2013 4:01:00 AM
Very nice closure to this dreamscape. The last two lines are therapeutic. Enjoyed your creative poem!
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Date: 1/31/2013 7:00:00 PM
dear Carolina Yankee,,,thank you so very much for your visit and information... appreciate so very much your kindness and advise :) luv and lights <3 Sk
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