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For 1432 Your Choice 2025 Poetry Contest sponsored by Brian Strand

Only in the Twilight River Zone

A Mississippi River boat,
where bygone generations float,
is the only place in books and dreams
where I can talk to that man, it seems.
Searching eyes peer fore and aft 
from a steamboat or a raft.  
As underneath the fog I drift,
distant voices give me a lift - 
an escaped slave tethered by reality's chain
I'll never see my dad again.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2025

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Etgen-Baker Avatar
December 24, 2025 at 4:27 PM
the memory of the river is true for me...always reminds me of my dad. Enjoyed this read.
Crandall Avatar
December 28, 2025 at 6:15 PM
Thanks, Sara!
Wolf Avatar
December 23, 2025 at 8:28 PM
Jim, Jim, Jim... You be der, man? I'm a fixin' to cross de Great Ohio Ribber soon. You gwine be free as de bird. ~ Tweedle-Dee P.S. Can yon imagine if I even said the name 'Huck Finn' in public today? I'd be a fixin' to be pushin' up dem daisies, man. ... After all, why not read real literature, like 'Tony Becomes Toni' or 'LGBTQ Sandwiches the Norm at H.S. Cafeterias Today' or 'Kweer is So Kool,' etc. ~ LaShanda '6 -7' Wokenewski
Crandall Avatar
December 23, 2025 at 9:27 PM
Haha, I think you exaggerate, but I do hear there's controversy about it. I sure wouldn't ban it. I'm reading a book called "James" now, written from Jim's perspective. I feel that might be a little too "woke" for you Gershon :-))
Grubb Avatar
December 23, 2025 at 12:39 PM
This feels haunting and tender, especially in the way the river becomes a place where memory and longing meet. The setting gives the whole piece a quiet, aching beauty, and I’m really moved by how you hold both loss and connection throughout. The final turn lands with such honest force. Beautifully done, David.
Crandall Avatar
December 23, 2025 at 9:25 PM
Thanks Mickey! I really appreciate your kind comments.
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