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One Way Ticket ,Mussetle

I ride on a night train to dreams Dreaming of a journey far off Farther into your heart that bleeds Bleeding like a sunrise at dawn Dawning into these eyes with warmth Warming numb frozen tears to melt Melting like icicles in Spring Spring's field Where last whistles blow slow For Richard`s contest Mussetle

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Richard Lamoureux

Date: 1/17/2015 3:15:00 PM

I enjoyed rereading your winning poem!

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 1/11/2015 9:00:00 PM

Awesome win. Charma... LINDA

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 1/10/2015 12:14:00 AM

I love how your train flows smoothly with such beautiful imagery. I felt like I was riding along. Congrats! Hugs, Rhonda

Tim Smith

Date: 1/5/2015 8:49:00 PM

Congratulations on the big win...toot toot : )

Jan Allison

Date: 1/5/2015 3:59:00 PM

Beautifully written many congrats:-) hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 1/5/2015 3:24:00 PM

This was a fun ride, Conratulations!

Charmaine Chircop
Date: 1/5/2015 3:43:00 PM

Aw Im delighted Richard : ).Thanks so much for the third placement : ) Hugs Charma

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/21/2014 5:45:00 PM

wow, I just love where you took this one way train. You know, I have only seen one other one this beautiful so I just know you have a great chance to garner a high spot!! You really embraced the form.

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 12/13/2014 8:51:00 AM

Congratulations Char, I know you do not enter contests to do this for Richard shows what a big heart you have. A Fav!

Paul Callus

Date: 12/6/2014 3:58:00 PM

Well done Charm!!! Not an easy form to keep the flow going, but you managed it with ease. Hope you had an enjoyable holiday. // paul

Paul Callus
Date: 1/5/2015 4:26:00 PM

...and back with very deserved congratulations, Charm! well done! // paul

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 12/1/2014 9:10:00 PM

this flowed a truly beautiful pen charmaine

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 12/1/2014 4:25:00 PM

You did a great job on this char, I love what you did with it.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 12/1/2014 3:02:00 PM

Please make an exception for me.;0)

Charmaine Chircop
Date: 12/1/2014 3:27:00 PM

If I wake up tomorrow..I'll enter it..Because nw im using phone not to wake my daughter with light.Tomorrow I try my best to be online on laptop and enter it : ). Then I see all soupers Sunday Eve orMonday morn cause We're going abroad for a short holiday.' ) : ).Tnks for your support! :.)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 12/1/2014 9:12:00 AM

Charmaine, you have to enter this in my contest. I am so impressed!

Charmaine Chircop
Date: 12/1/2014 2:23:00 PM

Thanks for introducing this exquisite inspiring form Richard.Tnks for liking my post ,but you know I hardly ever partucipate in contests dear friend.It was much fun writing this and thankyou :.)

Timothy Hicks

Date: 12/1/2014 1:56:00 AM

Reminds me of a bit of the blitz form, though with slightly less repetition. What stood out to me was the fast rhythm of the piece, and then how it ended on a soft note, to carry things back to earth. Your expression of spring was very nice.

Kevin Fairbrother

Date: 11/30/2014 11:41:00 PM

Charmaine makes my poems look second rate. I shall read more of your work, thanks Also thanks for your comments on my poems but really are they any good?? and what form do they take. Thanks Kev

Justin Bordner

Date: 11/30/2014 8:31:00 PM

There is a destination in everyone's heart that knows of budding hope and love, beyond barricades of base fear and selfish song...you have found the love vista that you need, its very beautiful, and it is yours, a piece of heart devoted to your beauty and needs Charma. The linguistic segways into each verse are very emotional and intelligent, escalating into glorious, young affection. I feel this poem deeply, happily...J.A.B.

David Meade

Date: 11/30/2014 8:06:00 PM

Riding the night love train -- the sights, sounds, the darkness . . . Springfields is a wild country with deep valleys filled with wild flowers. . .