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One Way Ticket ,Mussetle

I ride
on a night train
to dreams

Dreaming
of a journey
far off

Farther
into your heart
that bleeds

Bleeding
like a sunrise
at dawn

Dawning
into these eyes
with warmth

Warming
numb frozen tears
to melt

Melting
like icicles
in Spring

Spring's field
Where last whistles
blow slow



For Richard`s contest Mussetle

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Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/17/2015 3:15:00 PM I enjoyed rereading your winning poem! Login to Reply

Poet Destroyer A Date: 1/11/2015 9:00:00 PM Awesome win. Charma... LINDA Login to Reply

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders Date: 1/10/2015 12:14:00 AM I love how your train flows smoothly with such beautiful imagery. I felt like I was riding along. Congrats! Hugs, Rhonda Login to Reply

Tim Smith Date: 1/5/2015 8:49:00 PM Congratulations on the big win...toot toot : ) Login to Reply

Jan Allison Date: 1/5/2015 3:59:00 PM Beautifully written many congrats:-) hugs Jan xx Login to Reply

Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/5/2015 3:24:00 PM This was a fun ride, Conratulations! Login to Reply Charmaine Chircop Date: 1/5/2015 3:43:00 PM Aw Im delighted Richard : ).Thanks so much for the third placement : ) Hugs Charma

Andrea Dietrich Date: 12/21/2014 5:45:00 PM wow, I just love where you took this one way train. You know, I have only seen one other one this beautiful so I just know you have a great chance to garner a high spot!! You really embraced the form. Login to Reply

Maurice Yvonne Date: 12/13/2014 8:51:00 AM Congratulations Char, I know you do not enter contests to do this for Richard shows what a big heart you have. A Fav! Login to Reply

Paul Callus Date: 12/6/2014 3:58:00 PM Well done Charm!!! Not an easy form to keep the flow going, but you managed it with ease. Hope you had an enjoyable holiday. // paul Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/5/2015 4:26:00 PM ...and back with very deserved congratulations, Charm! well done! // paul

Liam Mcdaid Date: 12/1/2014 9:10:00 PM this flowed a truly beautiful pen charmaine Login to Reply

Maurice Yvonne Date: 12/1/2014 4:25:00 PM You did a great job on this char, I love what you did with it. Login to Reply

Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/1/2014 3:02:00 PM Please make an exception for me.;0) Login to Reply Charmaine Chircop Date: 12/1/2014 3:27:00 PM If I wake up tomorrow..I'll enter it..Because nw im using phone not to wake my daughter with light.Tomorrow I try my best to be online on laptop and enter it : ). Then I see all soupers Sunday Eve orMonday morn cause We're going abroad for a short holiday.' ) : ).Tnks for your support! :.)

Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/1/2014 9:12:00 AM Charmaine, you have to enter this in my contest. I am so impressed! Login to Reply Charmaine Chircop Date: 12/1/2014 2:23:00 PM Thanks for introducing this exquisite inspiring form Richard.Tnks for liking my post ,but you know I hardly ever partucipate in contests dear friend.It was much fun writing this and thankyou :.)

Timothy Hicks Date: 12/1/2014 1:56:00 AM Reminds me of a bit of the blitz form, though with slightly less repetition. What stood out to me was the fast rhythm of the piece, and then how it ended on a soft note, to carry things back to earth. Your expression of spring was very nice. Login to Reply

Kevin Fairbrother Date: 11/30/2014 11:41:00 PM Charmaine makes my poems look second rate. I shall read more of your work, thanks Also thanks for your comments on my poems but really are they any good?? and what form do they take. Thanks Kev Login to Reply

Justin Bordner Date: 11/30/2014 8:31:00 PM There is a destination in everyone's heart that knows of budding hope and love, beyond barricades of base fear and selfish song...you have found the love vista that you need, its very beautiful, and it is yours, a piece of heart devoted to your beauty and needs Charma. The linguistic segways into each verse are very emotional and intelligent, escalating into glorious, young affection. I feel this poem deeply, happily...J.A.B. Login to Reply

David Meade Date: 11/30/2014 8:06:00 PM Riding the night love train -- the sights, sounds, the darkness . . . Springfields is a wild country with deep valleys filled with wild flowers. . . Login to Reply

Dorian Petersen Potter Date: 11/30/2014 4:58:00 PM Penned wonderfully Charmaine! A 7 for me! Have a lovely evening! :) Love and hugs! xxxx D. Login to Reply

Brenda Meier-Hans Date: 11/30/2014 4:45:00 PM Brilliantly penned Charmaine. Login to Reply

Sebastian Aaron Baez Date: 11/30/2014 4:24:00 PM This is heavy for some light poetry and but heavy I mean deep soulful and romantic! ?? I forgot magnificent as well. Login to Reply

Charmaine Chircop Date: 11/30/2014 4:10:00 PM Ps-Could even be - I ride/on a night train/Dreaming - dream songs/on a journey/far off ?? Login to Reply

Tim Smith Date: 11/30/2014 3:56:00 PM A perfect ride Charma...Is there room for me? :) .....hugs Tim Login to Reply Charmaine Chircop Date: 11/30/2014 4:15:00 PM Of course..We need the conductor!! : )