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One Way Ticket ,Mussetle


I ride
on a night train
to dreams

Dreaming
of a journey
far off

Farther
into your heart
that bleeds

Bleeding
like a sunrise
at dawn

Dawning
into these eyes
with warmth

Warming
numb frozen tears
to melt

Melting
like icicles
in Spring

Spring's field
Where last whistles
blow slow



For Richard`s contest Mussetle

absencebeautylight verse

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Richard Lamoureux

January 17, 2015 at 3:15 PM

I enjoyed rereading your winning poem!

Poet Destroyer A

January 11, 2015 at 9:00 PM

Awesome win. Charma... LINDA

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

January 10, 2015 at 12:14 AM

I love how your train flows smoothly with such beautiful imagery. I felt like I was riding along. Congrats! Hugs, Rhonda

Tim Smith

January 5, 2015 at 8:49 PM

Congratulations on the big win...toot toot : )

Jan Allison

January 5, 2015 at 3:59 PM

Beautifully written many congrats:-) hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux

January 5, 2015 at 3:24 PM

This was a fun ride, Conratulations!

Charmaine Chircop

January 5, 2015 at 3:43 PM

Aw Im delighted Richard : ).Thanks so much for the third placement : ) Hugs Charma

Andrea Dietrich

December 21, 2014 at 5:45 PM

wow, I just love where you took this one way train. You know, I have only seen one other one this beautiful so I just know you have a great chance to garner a high spot!! You really embraced the form.

Maurice Yvonne

December 13, 2014 at 8:51 AM

Congratulations Char, I know you do not enter contests to do this for Richard shows what a big heart you have. A Fav!

Paul Callus

December 6, 2014 at 3:58 PM

Well done Charm!!! Not an easy form to keep the flow going, but you managed it with ease. Hope you had an enjoyable holiday. // paul

Paul Callus

January 5, 2015 at 4:26 PM

...and back with very deserved congratulations, Charm! well done! // paul

Liam Mcdaid

December 1, 2014 at 9:10 PM

this flowed a truly beautiful pen charmaine

Maurice Yvonne

December 1, 2014 at 4:25 PM

You did a great job on this char, I love what you did with it.

Richard Lamoureux

December 1, 2014 at 3:02 PM

Please make an exception for me.;0)

Charmaine Chircop

December 1, 2014 at 3:27 PM

If I wake up tomorrow..I'll enter it..Because nw im using phone not to wake my daughter with light.Tomorrow I try my best to be online on laptop and enter it : ). Then I see all soupers Sunday Eve orMonday morn cause We're going abroad for a short holiday.' ) : ).Tnks for your support! :.)

Richard Lamoureux

December 1, 2014 at 9:12 AM

Charmaine, you have to enter this in my contest. I am so impressed!

Charmaine Chircop

December 1, 2014 at 2:23 PM

Thanks for introducing this exquisite inspiring form Richard.Tnks for liking my post ,but you know I hardly ever partucipate in contests dear friend.It was much fun writing this and thankyou :.)

Timothy Hicks

December 1, 2014 at 1:56 AM

Reminds me of a bit of the blitz form, though with slightly less repetition. What stood out to me was the fast rhythm of the piece, and then how it ended on a soft note, to carry things back to earth. Your expression of spring was very nice.

Kevin Fairbrother

November 30, 2014 at 11:41 PM

Charmaine makes my poems look second rate. I shall read more of your work, thanks Also thanks for your comments on my poems but really are they any good?? and what form do they take. Thanks Kev

Justin Bordner

November 30, 2014 at 8:31 PM

There is a destination in everyone's heart that knows of budding hope and love, beyond barricades of base fear and selfish song...you have found the love vista that you need, its very beautiful, and it is yours, a piece of heart devoted to your beauty and needs Charma. The linguistic segways into each verse are very emotional and intelligent, escalating into glorious, young affection. I feel this poem deeply, happily...J.A.B.