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One Time Too Many- Senryu Strings Ii

One time too many
maximum number of hits 
heart in rebellion

Keep your own baggage
I can hardly carry mine
help me don't harm me

No way to go back
Heart in hibernation mode
Sweet oblivion

Eileen Manassian

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Hidden Sister

September 13, 2014 at 7:24 PM

This touched me tonight as my heart has been hibernatjng also. Great write. J

Andrea Dietrich

August 31, 2014 at 3:10 PM

These are very good to read from you, Eileen. Tinged with sadness. I like that kind!

Eileen Manassian

August 31, 2014 at 8:36 PM

There is a lot of sadness in this one, Andrea. I can't figure things out sometimes. miscommunication is such a pain. When you're a sensitive soul, well, it can be torture. Take care of you!

Sara Kendrick

August 31, 2014 at 6:15 AM

A mate for life is suppose to be the person who helps one work through the baggage and get their life on track but it mostly works the other way and that special person hurts and adds more baggage to the mate's life..Enjoyed reading your string..Sara

Eileen Manassian

August 31, 2014 at 6:17 AM

Yes, that is the ideal, Sara, dear. As was intended. Ah...life is full of complexities. Thank you for your kind visit to my page. Hugs as ever...Eileen

Demetrios Trifiatis

August 31, 2014 at 4:03 AM

Ah, how beautiful is to come out of hibernation and find yourself in Spring time: Fresh, invigorated, enthusiastic and starting life anew with no baggage and a liberated heart! Excellent writing! Wait for the spring, it may come at any moment!

Eileen Manassian

August 31, 2014 at 6:17 AM

Is there such a thing, Demetri? I am done with waiting....for dreams are meant to be dreams...Thank you for you rkind visit to my work. As always, you have sage advice for my heart.

Maurice Yvonne

August 30, 2014 at 12:51 PM

great haikus. great idea to string them like pearls. helps me to study the form. thank you.

Maurice Yvonne

August 30, 2014 at 1:19 PM

oops. sorry. i do know the difference but i am not always astute enough to notice. thank you.

Eileen Manassian

August 30, 2014 at 1:08 PM

Hi, Maurice. Senryu is like haiku but the theme is on life lessons and not nature...for what I understand. Thank you for your visit to me. I need I tonight as I'm a bit low.

Jack Ellison

August 30, 2014 at 9:34 AM

Oh my dearest Betty Boop, Queen of the Senryu! Happiness CAN outweigh the sad... trust me! Love, Kenny! XOXOX

Eileen Manassian

August 30, 2014 at 1:09 PM

I trust you, Kenny! You are a sweetie and I love you dearly. Hugs

Richard Lamoureux

August 30, 2014 at 8:28 AM

These are very effective, I van relate. For me sleep is my hibernation mode, things really do look better in the morning.

Eileen Manassian

August 30, 2014 at 1:09 PM

They do for me too. That's when I take my happy pill. Thanks for the visit.

Regina Mcintosh

August 29, 2014 at 11:56 PM

I enjoyed your poems. They're excellent. Happy writing and God bless you. Love and prayers, Gina

Eileen Manassian

August 30, 2014 at 4:47 AM

Thank you, Regina. I'm glad to have this lovely post from you. It boosts my morale.

Nette Onclaud

August 29, 2014 at 9:17 PM

my, a creative package painfully realistic and so well expressed, elieen.., huggs

Eileen Manassian

August 30, 2014 at 4:47 AM

Thanks, Nette. Good to have a visit from you. I'll be your way soon! :)

Justin Bordner

August 29, 2014 at 8:34 PM

The exhaustion of a heart, lost patience, too many bruises, I know this too Eileen. Every time I try to tuck my heart to sleep, it cries, yells, and fights to taste more battle, more love.My heart is a light sleeper, I guess my heart can sleep when its dead : ) Justin

Eileen Manassian

August 30, 2014 at 4:48 AM

May that be far from you, Justin. May your heart keep beating a happy tune of love and fulfillment. It's good that it is a light sleeper. You never know when it will be awakened by a seeker for your goodness.

Charmaine Chircop

August 29, 2014 at 7:16 PM

I love all your three senryu but my favourite is the second one-Sad but guess life has to have its sad moments to make us appreciate that sweet oblivion in tomorrow.Love love them.

Eileen Manassian

August 30, 2014 at 4:49 AM

Yes, dear. Sadness is part of life. Can't live without the other. I've had my share....of both. I just wish the happy would outweigh the sad. Hugs to you. You bring me happy thoughts.

David Brown

August 29, 2014 at 4:24 PM

Beautiful as always, Elieen. Loved the hibernation image...well done.

Eileen Manassian

August 30, 2014 at 4:49 AM

Thanks, David. I appreciate your affirmation.

Carolyn Devonshire

August 29, 2014 at 2:27 PM

Dear Eileen, It's so sad to think of a heart in "hibernation mode," but I'm right there with you. The middle verse is amazing. Indeed, "Keep your own baggage." People want mates who are baggage-free, but they carry a lot of their woes with them wherever they go. Excellent poem! Love, Carolyn

Eileen Manassian

August 30, 2014 at 4:51 AM

We all have baggage, dear Carolyn. We all do. We just hurt others when we project our baggage unto them. I know I do that sometimes....It's sad. Love covers it all, I guess. I can never be in hibernation mode. Not with someone I care about. Thanks for the visit!

One Time Too Many- Senryu Strings Ii

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