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Prince charming awaits her, soon to be her Knight in shining armor.

SHE NOW LAY NAKED

The spiral staircase made her high heels sing 
Most elegantly, she danced from bottom to top 
Pedals of roses Isled the hand scraped, oak wood floor that leads to his room 
A hand woven, fringed carpet, with golden stair rods formed the way 
Crystals from a hanging chandelier, rain bowed the doorway 
She entered, full with the desire for love 
She lustfully unbuttons her gown and slips out of her heels 
His room windowed, with his bed beneath a canopy on his balcony 
From here the city churches pierced the mist 
Above the mist, two doves coo-cooing on a high wire 
A row of lit lampposts lead to his king-size abode 
Molded from clay, lion statues facing welcoming guests 
The entry to his mansion, a replica of a Byzantine church door covered in vine 
In the corner of his guest room, the harpist plays "Creatures of Prometheus" 
Half beneath the satin sheets, she now lay naked 
He closed it, and, now smiling, crossed the square
 
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Line 1     The spiral staircase made her high heels sing 
Line 9     From here the city churches pierced the mist 
Line 16   He closed it, and, now smiling, crossed the square 
5/9/18

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Date: 5/10/2018 10:59:00 AM
Love the scene you created, Charles, beautiful done. Good luck in Viv contest. Thank you for reading, “A Letter on the Desktop”. Hugs Eve
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Date: 5/10/2018 11:09:00 AM
Hello Eve, thank you for your kind words and the good luck...I'm thinking I'm going to need some...lol Loved your poem...thanks for reading this and the much appreciated visit...Hugs // Charlie :-)
Date: 5/10/2018 6:25:00 AM
Nice imagery...what happened to the woman...is she cold...All the best Charles
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Date: 5/10/2018 6:32:00 AM
She had to get back to the coach... before midnight! Thanks Arturo...All the best to you as well!
Date: 5/10/2018 12:34:00 AM
Oh wow, this is awesome. I love the imagery that comes to mind, I'm a sucker for old world charm. Good luck in the contest Charlie, this already has winner stamped all over it....Maria :)
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Date: 5/10/2018 5:53:00 AM
Thank you for the encouraging kind words Maria, I had to do some homework trying to do this one. These are so hard for me to do, especially this one. Fingers crossed...Charlie :-)
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