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One June Afternoon

The breeze was temperate as we both lay upon our backs and stared up at blue sky. Two birds hopped on the grass as if at play, and buds on untrimmed bushes blushed nearby. The oak which we reclined beneath was old. You loved the shade it gave us, so you said, “I find this tree more valuable than gold.” I think I laughed at that and shook my head! Seeing your sweet eyes and bronzed complexion compelled me to declare, “Well, you must see obviously my own prized possession! It’s he who brings eternal love to me - the one who gave me a new lease on life in this and every other season - who has made earth heaven for his loving wife. I think by now you know that someone’s you!” Aug 4, 2019 For Michelle Faulkner's "A Summer Day Redo" Poetry Contest Ten required words used in poem: temperate, buds, lease, possession, heaven, complexion, eternal, gold, untrimmed, shade.

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Date: 1/28/2020 6:33:00 PM
Andrea congrats on your top win!;)
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Date: 1/28/2020 6:17:00 PM
Just beautiful, Andrea:-) Loved this. Congratulations on your great win!
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Date: 1/28/2020 5:23:00 PM
Really lovely setting of the scene and such tender emotion portrayed in words! Congratulations on your top placement!
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Date: 8/30/2019 2:52:00 AM
Back to congratulate you Andrea. Well done! : ) xxoo
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Date: 8/30/2019 12:45:00 AM
A brilliant poem Andrea - well done - congratulations - I love it! Hugs, Jenny
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Date: 8/29/2019 3:22:00 PM
What a wonderful love story, Andrea, thanks for entering my contest!
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Date: 8/20/2019 7:32:00 AM
Beautifully rendered Andrea...best wishes..
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Date: 8/9/2019 4:43:00 PM
When one finds a soul mate, everything can be withstood if they are by your side. This is a sweet sonnet Andrea. I am sure it will do well in the contest! : ) xxoo
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Date: 8/7/2019 2:28:00 PM
Wow, terrific use of the word bank... great write, my friend! ;)
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Date: 8/7/2019 11:04:00 AM
Just let them think what they may. About how you romantically say. These words you speak from your true heart. No need to infer or tear it apart. <3 :)
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 8/7/2019 3:28:00 PM
thanks, Les. I totally get what you mean.
Date: 8/6/2019 9:41:00 PM
Such engaging lines of sweetness and love! Loved it ... CayCay
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Date: 8/5/2019 10:29:00 PM
G'day Andrea … really enjoyed the flow of your sonnet. The romance and landscape certainly blend perfectly - thank you Andrea - Lindsay
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Date: 8/5/2019 7:23:00 AM
A splendid June afternoon..sweet conversation engrossed in love..a winning poem you wrote, Andrea.
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Date: 8/5/2019 5:24:00 AM
How fast and wonderful was the trip? Did you take any pictures and did you put them on Facebook?
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Date: 8/5/2019 5:20:00 AM
This is really August in Nampa.
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Date: 8/5/2019 1:24:00 AM
Whoa! this is lovely! Good Luck! :)
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Date: 8/4/2019 6:43:00 PM
It was so well done, that I forgot you had to include ten required words. Beautiful tribute to your marriage, I hope you are home safe from your travels, my friend.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 8/4/2019 7:53:00 PM
I write lots of fantasy stuff,Caren!! this is pure fiction. Yes, I had a safe and wonderful fast trip!
Date: 8/4/2019 4:05:00 PM
So wonderfully, romantic, Andrea, Like a scene from a movie.)) Panagiota
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Date: 8/4/2019 2:58:00 PM
This is such a sweet write, Andrea! Best wishes in the contest! Love, Kim
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