Michael Jordan Poet Couplet

Once Was a King

There once was Castle just over the hill
That belonged to a King with an iron will

Nestled safely behind his Castle wall
With an army to insure they wouldn’t fall

It was clear for the entire world to see
Destiny would record him in history

The richest King in all of the land
A beautiful Queen at his right hand

He ruled the land from shore to shore
Tell me, “Could any man ask for more”?

Turns out this King had just one vice
He was so great he forgot to be nice

Against any force he was bound to win
So the devil attacked him from with-in

Such a great King skilled with the sword
Much too great a King to turn to the Lord

Watched his entire Kingdom crumble away
Because he was to great to kneel and pray

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Deron Roberts October 14, 2008 at 9:35 PM I enjoyed this very much. First of yours I read but wont be the last

Steven Mossburg October 10, 2008 at 8:59 AM You point (I think) very cleverly at us all. We so often forget that ALL we HAVE and ALL we ARE has come from HIM.

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Autumn Rose Wood October 8, 2008 at 9:42 AM AHHH! Much better. The message of this is so great! Thank you for writing!

Arwa Hussin October 7, 2008 at 11:00 AM I admire how it rhymes and how it's different :)

Heidie Buys October 3, 2008 at 3:34 PM Breathtaking in the truth and the way you have written this. Spellbinding and a very good read. Very well done. Love Heidie

Deneen White October 3, 2008 at 2:58 PM hi Michael, a king so great he forgot to be nice, a king too great to pray, Jesus Christ was also a King, The King Of Kings, the Greatest King to ever walk the face of the earth, and he was never to haughty, and proud to kneel down and pray to his heavenly father, he is the greates king of all, Michael know that your heavenly father looks down on you and says to the angels that is Michael and I am proud of him, this gives me the inspiration to be and do better, thanks for your comments D-nyce

Autumn Rose Wood October 2, 2008 at 9:52 AM I love a poet will to learn! This poem is strong, but you need to be aware of exact rhyme. walls rhymes with falls, not fall and the like. Also there are three kinds of 2 - two, too, and to. In your line Because he was to great to kneel and pray, I believe you want too great. I may be mistaken though. Thank God no one is perfect. I am proud to know all that you've overcome so that you can share your light! May God continue to bless you! I apologize if you find me too nick-pickity(sic)

Vince Suzadail Jr. October 2, 2008 at 7:14 AM There should be only one True King. With a little faith we'll all be part of His Kingdom someday. I liked this. Vince

James Foulk October 1, 2008 at 8:18 PM Michael this was a well written piece of fine poetry. hopes everything goes ok, i had four front teeth pulled once, i have a parcel there now. sounds like you in for a big one, but you will be better once the pain wears off.

Trudy Diane Rider October 1, 2008 at 3:20 PM May you caslte forever stand proud on humble ground Michael~Tru~

Phyllis Babcock October 1, 2008 at 1:06 PM Many will deny God's kingdom. He gave us everything we have and can take it away just as easily. God Bless Phyl

Michael Torres October 1, 2008 at 12:34 PM "Humble thyself in the sight of the Lord and HE will lift you up." Nice flow, very well said. God's richest blessings to you, Toni, and Michaela........Give them my love.......Janice

Carrie Richards October 1, 2008 at 8:24 AM Best wishes, and good luck today with the oral surgery, Michael!!:) Will be thinking about that bright smile that you'll have when it's all behind you! It will shine all of Willows....they can save on P.G. & E. downtown!! Take care ~Carrie

Michaela Payne October 1, 2008 at 7:27 AM Great story with a great lesson, I just loved this Michael. Blessings, ~Michaela~

Carrie Richards October 1, 2008 at 7:06 AM What a lesson here, Michael! This powerful poem should be read by so many in our modern world. It doesn't just apply to kings and kingdoms...You painted the picture very clearly! ~ Have a good day...Neighbor! ~Carrie

Autumn Rose Wood October 1, 2008 at 7:01 AM This poem packs a hidden powerful punch. Some gramatical(sic) mistakes detract from your brilliance, but it is still a work of art.

Sharon Winter October 1, 2008 at 5:16 AM Powerful message dear Michael, so well expressed. With love, Shar

Kristin Reynolds October 1, 2008 at 3:52 AM Amen! That is how it works, one reeps what one sows - simple as that. you get back what you give, treat those how you wish to be treated...well said, Michael, love Kristin

Adell Foster October 1, 2008 at 1:26 AM It goes to show that pride cometh before the fall. That king should have realized that without God he could do nothing and that with God he could accomplish all things... Sometimes people tend to get to high for their britches forgetting that there is none greater than our Creator...That's a hugh mistake for that is when they tend to stumble and fall. There is wisdom in the lines of this write. I thank you Michael for sharing such an awesome read. God's Love and Many Blessings, Always, Adell

Leokadia Durmaj October 1, 2008 at 12:57 AM Some people believe they are greater then thou, yet soon they find out in death they have no power. All the treasures in the world count for nothing before God. Very well written Michael, there is wisdom in your words. Lee

Brian Strand October 1, 2008 at 12:44 AM Like this narrative style Michael.More power to your elbow.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments

Michael Torres September 30, 2008 at 10:05 PM So well said Michael: When we dont include the Lord in our lives , in our decision process when we shut him out , we are openining up ourselves to failure. Sometimes we can be our own worst enemy. The other fact you mention is the devils attack and thats always relentless. How canprosper.....You cant. We certainly need our Lord in our lives. Thankyou for uplifting me with this wonderful peice Michael. God bless Michael and Janice

George Anos September 30, 2008 at 8:48 PM The folly of pride and the holding on to the intangibles and the material. You've explored these things very studiously and deep in this humble but powerful poem Michael! Brgds.