once upon perfection

there’s no such thing as perfection ~ if there was I could never be here

winked the devil to god ~ who replied this once you’re perfectly sincere 

By 
David Kavanagh
Copyright © | Year Posted 2025

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Dietrich Avatar
April 22, 2025 at 11:31 PM
I enjoyed your wit here!
Kavanagh  Avatar
April 23, 2025 at 12:51 AM
Thanks Andrea, shame this one was taken out of all proportion and overspilled into some comment threads, cheers David
Beaufort Avatar
April 16, 2025 at 4:32 PM
David, this is remarkably clever and funny!!! Some people claim they are perfect or that perfection exists. I'm more of the belief that we just exist and will hopefully learn how not to destroy what we have here. I'm thinking it's very lucky we have a planet that supports us. I worry that one person's definition of perfection could be our definition of hell, so we should be exercising a lot of care based on science. Take care and many smiles heading your way from yours truly!
Kavanagh  Avatar
April 17, 2025 at 6:48 AM
Wise words Duke, most of my posts are built around the premise of perception and how reality differs from one person to the next, we are very lucky to have this planet, as we don’t have a replacement lined up if all goes to hell, thanks again for stopping by and perceiving this paradoxical one in good light, cheers David
Lane Avatar
April 16, 2025 at 10:29 AM
Can I say, "Vamoose," David? Please... It shouldn't take a direct word for a person to realize when he's overstepped a boundary... repeatedly.
Lane Avatar
April 16, 2025 at 10:57 AM
Never is such harassment a threat to you. The fact that he tries is ridiculous. I was thinking of all the poets who would rather enjoy your poetry and comments without being exposed to religious diatribes.
Kavanagh  Avatar
April 16, 2025 at 10:50 AM
Thanks Lin but there’s certainly no threat to me, however I could see how a person with thinner skin might be intimidated by such behaviour, for expressing themselves into a poem, :)
Jama Avatar
April 16, 2025 at 8:19 AM
This is wickly brilliant David. Absolutely brillant. I can't stand people shoving thier beliefs down everyone's throat. People have the right to believe what they want but then should respect that others have the right to disagree and believe differently. Throughly enjoyed your monokus.
Jama Avatar
April 16, 2025 at 9:16 AM
Yes I certainly understand the distaste left in the mouth when religion is shoved down one's throat. I left organised religion completely after years if it as a pre teen. I could go on for hours with what my beliefs are but I don't want to be a bore. Lol
Kavanagh  Avatar
April 16, 2025 at 9:06 AM
High praise Sara, you certainly see these Monoku’s exactly for what they are, non offensive and oxymoronic in nature, had enough of religious dogma being shoved down my throat in school, using corporal punishment, cheers David
Allison Avatar
April 16, 2025 at 7:45 AM
Great monokus and I'm smiling at the comments David - you and sing from the same hymn sheet and I can't abide seeing folk on their soap box and having religion rammed down people's throat but they always feel the need to preach lol. hugs jan xx
Kavanagh  Avatar
April 16, 2025 at 8:48 AM
Heya Jan, People can preach from the highest mountains if they want, so long as they don’t try ramming it down my throat, that soap box is certainly starting to look very slippery and slimy today! Thanks so much for stopping by, cheers David
Cunningham Avatar
April 16, 2025 at 4:30 AM
So true David, nothing is perfect plenty of flaws everywhere, we do strive for perfection but we're not always successful, all we can do is give it our best shot. Tom
Kavanagh  Avatar
April 16, 2025 at 5:52 AM
Indeed Tom, perfection and mortality are incompatible by their very own definition, we can only do our best until we become (deviants) as the same commenter above and two places below seems to think! Cheers David
Lane Avatar
April 16, 2025 at 1:45 AM
For God's sake, literally and respectfully. Jesus preached to those who wanted to listen, but he never chased after anyone who repeatedly made it known there was no religious interest. That point has been breached here with an unwanted appetizer that became a plate overloaded until it became a choking hazard. It's unacceptable for one of 'those guys' to continue jawing when ears don't want to listen. It's offensive to you, David, to God and the organization.
Kavanagh  Avatar
April 16, 2025 at 2:47 AM
Thanks Lin for clarifying that point, Jesus never tried to ram anything down his followers throats, he preached to those who wanted to listen just like you said, just because I am agnostic doesn’t mean I believe Jesus was not a cool guy, my monoku never mentioned any religion in particular, that was just assumed by an opportunist that wanted to put his own twisted version of his beliefs across, as you said flying in the face of the organisation he claims to represent, thank you so much for pointing that out, cheers David
Goldsmith Avatar
April 15, 2025 at 11:35 AM
I enjoyed reading this creative Monoku write. "Good Luck" if for a contest. Have a wonderful spring day.........
Kavanagh  Avatar
April 15, 2025 at 12:47 PM
Heya Paula, glad you enjoyed this one, the game of life has so many twists and turns going on; unfortunately I don’t think there’s any (perfectly) fitting contests going on for this piece, cheers David
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