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Once There Was a Love

Once the world around me was beautiful and serene and my life was filled with fiery passion and desire. But those flames are becoming embers in my memories, in reveries of a lost love for which I desperately yearn. It's become such a ponderous burden, leaving deep scars upon my wounded heart. When in the gloom of night, I see his handsome face, waves of emotions rise and fall inside of me, for when his visits end, I'm left alone upon the shore. With haunting thoughts of all that we once shared, I wake with lingering images of being held in his arms. Never have I been willing to accept the emptiness I feel. Pensively, I search the horizon expecting him to appear. It’s with misplaced hope that I imagine him there. I walk the beach at dawn and to the ocean I confide my wish to be with him, if God would close His eyes. Hindered by knowing it's not the course I should take, but feeling as though I'm drowning within an abyss, A bottomless pit from which I will never escape. Once, there was a great love, yet sometimes it seems it was but a dream, and now all traces of us are fading, for each time I draw his name with mine in the sand the tide rushes in and quickly washes them both away. October 19, 2022 ~ A Poetry contest by JCB Brul Inspired by a song ~ Once There Was A Love

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Date: 10/21/2022 2:17:00 AM
Such a sad ending, but such a gorgeous poem! "for each time I draw his name with mine in the sand the tide rushes in and quickly washes them both away." This was perfect!
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Date: 10/20/2022 5:55:00 AM
Hypnotic write Jenna, enjoyed every line.
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Jenna Logan
Date: 10/20/2022 5:58:00 AM
I'm delighted that you found my poem to your liking, Seeker.
Date: 10/19/2022 7:57:00 PM
Lost love is a tragedy for the heart to endure. You have captured this in this young ladys thoughts. Well done Jenna. Thanks for sharing....
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Jenna Logan
Date: 10/20/2022 5:57:00 AM
and thanks ever so much for reading my lines and leaving your thoughtful remarks, Michael.
Date: 10/19/2022 5:32:00 PM
So beautifully “Jenna” written….left me feeling sad! Just lovely….Debx
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Jenna Logan
Date: 10/19/2022 5:35:00 PM
It tugged on my heartstrings while writing. Thanks, Deb.
Date: 10/19/2022 1:10:00 PM
Jenna, this is a lovely poem. I think it's very close to Blank Verse, which most of us find exceptionally difficult to write. I know I do. You are to be commended. Exceptional writing. A FAVE for me.
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Jenna Logan
Date: 10/19/2022 3:21:00 PM
Milt, I’m not really familiar with blank verse so I’ll take your word on that. Thank you for appreciating my poetry.
Date: 10/19/2022 11:57:00 AM
Beautiful piece of free verse Jenna, lost love imagery is off the scale, yet totally synchronised with the tidal movement throughout, one of the best and saddest poems I’ve read, with an ending to die for, a huge Fave, cheers David
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Jenna Logan
Date: 10/19/2022 3:18:00 PM
It’s like pricking myself with a needle until tears flow but often serves as the catalyst for good poetry. ;)
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David Kavanagh
Date: 10/19/2022 12:41:00 PM
No thanks needed Jenna, it’s absolutely brilliant and moving, I’m certain it moved you too whilst writing, ain’t poetry great when it’s killing us softly.
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Jenna Logan
Date: 10/19/2022 12:10:00 PM
That's quite complimentary of you, David, and greatly appreciated. It's not common for me to write in free verse, but it was the requirement for this one. Thank you for your thoughtful comments as well as faving it.
Date: 10/19/2022 11:01:00 AM
Sad when that happens Jenna and you just can't accept that it's over and you end up torturing yourself unable to move on. Great entry for the contest, good luck. Tom
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Jenna Logan
Date: 10/19/2022 11:47:00 AM
Hi Tom. I'm hoping it will fit the criteria for the contest, but if not, I'm still glad you enjoyed it. Thanks so much.

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