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On Tiptoes

On tiptoes I walk into your house It's a surprise I can't make a sound! On tiptoes I open your bedroom door I'm so excited We were so long apart On tiptoes I walk to your bed It's so dark But I can see you there I bend over to kiss your face And stop, frozen in place There's an arm circling your chest And another head where mine used to rest You're not alone And I didn't know That I had been replaced So fast, so cold On tiptoes I back off There's no reason to stay There's nothing there anymore On tiptoes I walk to your front door I look around and say goodbye To the future I have no more On heavy steps I walk away Must find my place Must find my way. **** December 05, 2016

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Date: 12/7/2016 1:44:00 PM
Aww, Claudia, such a sad poem... And what San said: tiptoes vs heavy feet is so wonderfully expressed.
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Claudia Polydoro
Date: 12/7/2016 10:01:00 PM
Thanks my friend... I had no plans for it to turn sad, it just happened... and as I told San, I thought the heavy steps would help to express the sadness and sorrow... :)
Date: 12/7/2016 1:12:00 PM
Oh you wrote this for me..lol...my ex called me timmy tiptoes...that sounds like how our relationship ended...sad but beautifully done
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Claudia Polydoro
Date: 12/7/2016 9:55:00 PM
Ohhh sorry to hear about it Tim... my husband after reading it, was worried that my friends would hate him thinking that he had cheated on me - lol - I promised him to add a disclaimer that it was totally fictional (what it is ;) ). Thanks :)
Date: 12/7/2016 8:25:00 AM
Wow, this is so sad an heartbreaking Claudia. You have expressed this shock and sadness so well.
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Claudia Polydoro
Date: 12/7/2016 9:48:00 PM
Thanks Chris, I'm glad that I could express the shock and sadness in a convincing way :)

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