Poet Tacito Poet Free verse

On the Outside, Looking In

"When humanity becomes louder than love, stay out of its way. At times, it's better to be the lion in the distance, rather than the sheep losing their way...again."

This was the 1st time
I felt out of place.

Its impact mimicked abused parallelograms
Unto emptiness’ solution

I witness sliced wrists shedding bohemian smiles.

Testament verses
Latching onto anchors of invalid mo(u)rning

There was no sunrise to be found,
Because humanity kept making love to silhouetted blinders

I was surrounded by shovels
Ransacked
For the sake of digging louder messages’ trench

While I
Caress incipient wings
And half-full Windex bottles
Just to keep perception from clouding my lyrics

Because nobody wants to see eye to eye…

…

…cataract-laced speeches permeate tainted whispers
Of an innocent breath 
Simply
Searching
For B-rated serendipity

Oh, this was the 1st time
I felt out of place.

Turning away from windowed afflictions
Ready
To step towards gratitude’s breath

Outside,
No longer looking in

How good it feels.

Yet, I still miss my friends.

©Drake J. Eszes 

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Debbie Duncan July 24, 2015 at 11:12 PM I do love the way you write Drake. Your title brought me in. I'm on the outside looking in Little Anthony & The Imperials 1964 . I was age 8-9. ALSO your 5th line about cut wrists. I have a poem called Fireflies on that subject. I need to start reading your word more often :)

Timothy Hicks November 25, 2014 at 4:00 PM It is said eyes are windows to the soul - maybe no one wants to see eye-to-eye cause they are insecure of what their soul might look like. I absolutely loved this part - There was no sunrise to be found, because humanity kept making love to silhouetted blinders." Wow! The artificial shadows and slits of light has somehow become more precious that the light itself. What a description! Poet Tacito January 7, 2015 at 1:00 PM Cheers to you sir! Great to read your comments again. Though, for me, it's been a long while too. I will always be grateful. Thanks, Tim!

Charmaine Chircop May 9, 2014 at 3:35 PM What can I say?I wish it could have been me writing such words..instead of being the silent lion in distance..Wish they could hear me roar like the lion song goes : )Powerful and honest.Going to my favs

Kim Van Breda May 9, 2014 at 7:12 AM There is that perfect quill of yours again-- such relevant subject matter that you have as always eloquently explored with your weaving words. Hope you are keeping well Drake Xx~Xx Poet Tacito May 9, 2014 at 8:29 AM Kim! :) Hi and yes, I'm doing good. It's just been super busy with life. It's been quite enjoyable. I hope you & Brenton are doing well! :)

Ana Espinola Collins May 8, 2014 at 8:46 PM Wow! That was an awesome read Drake :) Ana Poet Tacito May 9, 2014 at 12:11 AM Why thank you, Ana! :) I appreciate that so much!

Richard Lamoureux April 30, 2014 at 8:07 AM Good morning, I see this one is high on the top 100 recent list! Way to go Drake. Poet Tacito May 4, 2014 at 6:48 PM Hi & thank you so much, Richard. :)

Kelly Deschler April 25, 2014 at 8:38 PM It is difficult to want to stay here, when our friends can't get along. We do our best to keep the peace and still nothing works. But, we have to stick together and just hope for better days...This is a very expressive write. I could feel the frustration and sadness coming through. Another amazing poem, Drake! :) Poet Tacito May 4, 2014 at 6:47 PM Moreso, the center of this "circle" continues to set rules/more rules/etc., yet we don't even know their name...who they are. Trust/respect is earned for me. Kelly, you're awesome. I seriously appreciate it! :)

Liam Mcdaid April 24, 2014 at 12:42 PM excellent piece of writing loved it Poet Tacito May 4, 2014 at 6:46 PM Thanks, Liam.

Patricia Mitchell April 21, 2014 at 8:56 AM Drake, that's deep! Love it! Poet Tacito April 23, 2014 at 11:24 PM Hi & thank you for that, Patricia! :) I appreciate it!

Richard Lamoureux April 19, 2014 at 6:32 PM Hi Drake, some entertaining comments. Poet Tacito April 23, 2014 at 11:22 PM Indeed. :)

Carrie Richards April 13, 2014 at 1:47 PM Who among us, has not felt this way, I wonder? So familiar everyone must be with something as this moment. As we have grown, changed, or perhaps it is the world around us that has changed, what used to be, ...is no more.... and at first the loss may seem like grief..but perhaps instead relief that we can part and go our separate ways. I think I can relate to feeling this way more than once. This is clearly human! :) Poet Tacito April 13, 2014 at 3:14 PM A truly spectacular comment. :) Carrie, you're just awesome. I seriously appreciate it.

Lucilla Carrillo April 9, 2014 at 11:31 PM This is a wonderful write and I'm so glad that you are no more out of place. You are alright and you can take that to the bank. Thanks for sharing... Lucilla Poet Tacito April 10, 2014 at 8:17 AM Hey, Lucilla!!! :) I'm glad too. It's not easy, at times. I shall...deposit made! :) Thank you very much for that!

Cecilia Macfarlane April 9, 2014 at 8:47 PM I have always marched to the beat of my own drummer, and you Drake are marching and beating the hell out of your own drum I see! Excellent write! Hugs Poet Tacito April 10, 2014 at 8:16 AM Hey there! Damn right I am. :) Your words are truly appreciated, Cecilia! Thank you kindly!

Kira Price April 9, 2014 at 2:56 PM Proud to be different, never worried about fitting in, but boy there was the temptation..... Love this one very deep rooted and relational to what people feel everyday Poet Tacito April 10, 2014 at 8:13 AM Yes, absolutely!!! Damn that temptation. :) Thanks very much, Kira. Nice to see you around.

Richard Lamoureux April 9, 2014 at 12:58 PM This is worthy of a second, third, fourth and fifth read. Thanks for your visits Drake. Poet Tacito April 10, 2014 at 8:12 AM =) You rock, Richard.

Monterey Sirak April 9, 2014 at 7:12 AM (Whoops! I got too wordy and it made me divide into two comments) Now I revel in being on the 'outside', being different, walking three steps left of 'normal', dancing alone in the forest on moonlit nights and scaring scrubby looking campers (but that is another story) Thank you for this one! Poet Tacito April 9, 2014 at 7:41 AM Monterey, you have been MISSED!!!!!! Keep on scaring those campers! They need that excitement! ;-) You are BEYOND awesome!!!

Monterey Sirak April 9, 2014 at 7:11 AM Hi Drake, I faved this one...it resonates with me. "Sliced wrists shedding bohemian smiles" "Turning away from windowed afflictions" It feels like you were watching a long ago me and taking poetic notes. Once I realized I didn't care if I fit in, didn't understand what drove most people anyway, I turned away from observing what was only window dressing, and wandered off to find my own path. One friend stuck with me, and I found a few more along the way. Poet Tacito April 9, 2014 at 7:40 AM I was down this path too, a long time ago. A few aspects of it tried to creep back, but that just wasn't going to happen on my watch. HUGE HUG!

Mel Merrill April 8, 2014 at 9:38 PM Drake, thought I'd drop in and say hi. That, and I like this poem. I need to write more free verse--and I too miss my friends. Nicely done, Drake. Thanks for sharing. :) Mel Poet Tacito April 8, 2014 at 10:36 PM Hi & thank you, Mel. That's greatly appreciated! :)

Jennifer Perry April 7, 2014 at 1:24 PM Hi there! Great work as usual!! I really like the line: "There was no sunrise to be found, Because humanity kept making love to silhouetted blinders"...... Very deep, poetic, and mindfully visual! Cheers :) Poet Tacito April 7, 2014 at 11:08 PM Wow, hey stranger! :) Thank you so much, Jennifer. This was a pleasant surprise! Cheers to you too!

Demetrios Trifiatis April 7, 2014 at 7:49 AM This marvel of a poem leaves the mind wondering in a labyrinth of splendid interpretations without ever wishing an exit to find! Excellent my friend Drake! Poet Tacito April 7, 2014 at 8:16 AM Ah, kind sir, that is part of the beauty of it all. Many, many thanks, Demetrios! I look very forward to Sunday!

Richard Lamoureux April 6, 2014 at 2:31 PM Some great feedback Drake. Rock on brother. Richard Lamoureux April 6, 2014 at 3:12 PM If you have a chance check out my Bowkowski poem. Poet Tacito April 6, 2014 at 3:05 PM Indeed. I'm grateful. Thank you kind sir!

Russell Sivey April 6, 2014 at 8:31 AM I hear notes of periwinkles playing deep in my head because of your incredible write my friend! I feel the depths of my soul and find it more appealing due to this wondrous poem! Thank you for your awesome words here! What a grand piece, Great Work!! Poet Tacito April 6, 2014 at 9:00 AM What's up, Russell!!! That is quite cool & unexpected!!! =) I absolutely appreciate that sir. Thank you so much!

Laura Breidenthal April 5, 2014 at 9:27 PM in a world of such negativity. But you are a light, Drake! So thanks for sharing this beautiful poem. I really enjoyed reading. Sometimes feeling out of place can be a good feeling and that's how I really related to this poem. Being set apart is a gift and a blessing. Love your original style. Always, Laura Poet Tacito April 5, 2014 at 9:32 PM Yes, you are spot on with that. It is a gift. The path less traveled, I prefer that path. It has a much, much greater view. Thank you so very much with your very deep & noteworthy commentary. You're awesome, Laura!

Laura Breidenthal April 5, 2014 at 9:24 PM "Because nobody wants to see eye to eye" -I really like that line; it was very powerful for me. I also really like the lines "Ready/To step towards gratitude's breath"... Having gratitude is really a breath of fresh air and I loved how you crafted that. I think sometimes stepping back and looking at the bigger picture, and having a firm grasp of what's going on along with gratitude for what we have is important. That's what I got out of this anyway. Even those near and dear to us can lose heart- Poet Tacito April 5, 2014 at 9:31 PM Mmmhm... :)

Laura Breidenthal April 5, 2014 at 8:02 PM Love this love this love this! I will write more soon! Always, Laura Poet Tacito April 5, 2014 at 8:41 PM Awesome! =D So, you kinda like it? Is that what you're saying?? ;-) Thanks so much, Laura!

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