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On the Long Straight Path

all flowers     vanish 
                          when the long straight path
                                                     takes a sudden 
twist

March 19, 2021
for the 'Lets Get Creative With Haiku' Poetry Contest
of Constance La France

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Timothy Hicks

March 28, 2021 at 10:28 PM

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Joseph May

March 25, 2021 at 8:29 PM

Congrats on your win Andrea..

Panagiota Romios

March 25, 2021 at 10:51 AM

Congratulations on you win! Panagiota You go, girl! ))

Constance La France

March 24, 2021 at 3:14 PM

Andrea, congratulations on your win in my challenge Let's Get Creative with Haiku and you did exactly that, I love this excellent non traditional Haiku, well done_Constance

James Marshall Goff

March 24, 2021 at 7:36 AM

Congrats Andrea! visual & literal twist at the end is delightful!

Juliet Ligon

March 23, 2021 at 2:36 PM

Interesting layout that aptly follows the poems contents. Congratulations!

Howard Kerr

March 23, 2021 at 1:03 PM

Hello Andrea, Your usual immaculate standard. Well done. A figure three haiku is a term I conceived of myself(I think)! It refers to the numerical layout of the words in my contest entry(I hope)! I tried to arrange my words in the form of the number 3. Thanks for your comments. Howard

Timothy Hicks

March 23, 2021 at 12:44 PM

My eyes have to dart around just to read ... the twist in the actual path must be quite sharp! Curious what the contest entailed...

Suzette Richards

March 23, 2021 at 2:32 AM

I love the layout - it fits the narrative well :)) Congratulations on your top win, Andrea. ~Sus

Line Gauthier

March 22, 2021 at 9:00 PM

pretty clever, Andrea ~

Susan Ashley

March 22, 2021 at 7:23 PM

Your haiku's format and imagery are beautifully imagined, Andrea. Congratulations for your excellent win in Constance's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Kim Merryman

March 22, 2021 at 4:17 PM

Cleverly written, Andrea! Congrats on your win! Blessings, Kim M

Jan Allison

March 22, 2021 at 4:15 PM

excellent ink Andrea, many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Sotto Poet

March 22, 2021 at 3:12 PM

Congratulations, Andrea, on your Haiku win; you really deserve it; best wishes, Las

Kai Michael Neumann

March 22, 2021 at 1:40 PM

Congratulations on your winning poem, Kai

Anne-Lise Andresen

March 22, 2021 at 12:36 PM

- Congratulations on your first place in the contest, a creative twist Andrea :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Alexis Y.

March 22, 2021 at 11:37 AM

Hi Andrea, You did a good with the contest challenge. I found it to be well-written and creative. Congratulations on your 1st place win. It was well deserved. Have a great day:-) Alexis

Caren Krutsinger

March 22, 2021 at 1:56 AM

I like how you typed this with a sudden twist. Good luck in the contest.

Quoth Theraven

March 21, 2021 at 10:54 PM

Hello Andrea, A nice twist in the path. Love the vanished blooms in a heaven sent haiku. -Richard

Anitha Jayasankar

March 21, 2021 at 10:32 AM

Great idea for this contest Andrea. I loved how you used 'takes a sudden' and 'twist', in different lines... also 'when the long straight path' in one line..great imagery. I hope this will place high... I just miss writing for this interesting contest and other contests... I couldn't log in much to Soup....Hugs..~ Ani.