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On the Edge of a Dream

He was once the sun of her sky
And she, a star from a universe he esteemed
But their star crossed love went awry
Eclipsed by the traverse of moonbeams
A dark moon rising, on the edge of a dream

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Sheri Fresonke Harper

Date: 4/19/2013 6:09:00 PM

Excellent Joseph, I love moon and romance, very nicely written!

Suzanne Delaney

Date: 4/1/2013 10:35:00 PM

I love this poem, The imagery is so clever and it flows..

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/9/2013 9:26:00 PM

Just wanted to come back here and tell you that I really liked BOTH of your poems inspired by my contest. This one maybe would have placed even higher in the contest! In any event, you are great with quintains!!

Joseph May
Date: 1/9/2013 9:33:00 PM

I wanted to enter this one instead of caught in the sun....but as it happened you had already perused it

Elizabeth Wesley

Date: 1/3/2013 6:44:00 AM

Lovely imagery to describe a love gone wrong. Enjoyed this Joseph.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/31/2012 2:20:00 PM

joseph, to answer your question below, no, you can only enter one!

Carol Eastman

Date: 12/29/2012 12:03:00 PM

Amazingly written... Held me and kept me thinking.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/28/2012 4:35:00 PM

that was funny what you said about the Mary ann of my limerick. that she had him "by the nuptials" haha.

Joseph May
Date: 12/28/2012 7:16:00 PM

thanks Andrea...glad you liked it

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/28/2012 4:34:00 PM

hey, I see you were inspired by this title too, on the edge of a dream. I love how you made it into a dark moon rising. I think you are really getting into the 5 line poems.

Joseph May
Date: 12/28/2012 7:16:00 PM

Andrea I was going to ask you if we could enter 2 from the 5 choices...as one entry