Joseph May Poet Quintain (English)

On the Edge of a Dream

He was once the sun of her sky
And she, a star from a universe he esteemed
But their star crossed love went awry
Eclipsed by the traverse of moonbeams
A dark moon rising, on the edge of a dream

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Sheri Fresonke Harper April 19, 2013 at 6:09 PM Excellent Joseph, I love moon and romance, very nicely written!

Suzanne Delaney April 1, 2013 at 10:35 PM I love this poem, The imagery is so clever and it flows..

Andrea Dietrich January 9, 2013 at 9:26 PM Just wanted to come back here and tell you that I really liked BOTH of your poems inspired by my contest. This one maybe would have placed even higher in the contest! In any event, you are great with quintains!! Joseph May January 9, 2013 at 9:33 PM I wanted to enter this one instead of caught in the sun....but as it happened you had already perused it

Elizabeth Wesley January 3, 2013 at 6:44 AM Lovely imagery to describe a love gone wrong. Enjoyed this Joseph.

Andrea Dietrich December 31, 2012 at 2:20 PM joseph, to answer your question below, no, you can only enter one!

Carol Eastman December 29, 2012 at 12:03 PM Amazingly written... Held me and kept me thinking.

Andrea Dietrich December 28, 2012 at 4:35 PM that was funny what you said about the Mary ann of my limerick. that she had him "by the nuptials" haha. Joseph May December 28, 2012 at 7:16 PM thanks Andrea...glad you liked it

Andrea Dietrich December 28, 2012 at 4:34 PM hey, I see you were inspired by this title too, on the edge of a dream. I love how you made it into a dark moon rising. I think you are really getting into the 5 line poems. Joseph May December 28, 2012 at 7:16 PM Andrea I was going to ask you if we could enter 2 from the 5 choices...as one entry

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl December 28, 2012 at 3:52 PM Cool five lines Joseph xx Joseph May December 28, 2012 at 7:13 PM thank you Mandy

Poet Destroyer A December 28, 2012 at 3:50 PM cool last line like the poem xoxo pd Joseph May December 28, 2012 at 7:13 PM thank you PD